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Thursday, April 13, 2017More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, cars and other items.. It is true that there is an increasing number of people purchasing luxurious p

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More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, cars and other items What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?

It is true that there is an increasing number of people purchasing luxurious products of well-known brands While this phenomenon can be caused by several reasons, I personally believe

it would bring more harm than good

Admittedly, more people buying expensive possessions may be resulted from a handful of reasons Firstly, possessing expensive goods could be considered as a way of showing how rich and fashionable an individual is For example, affluent students usually drive pricy brand cars such as Mercedes and Ferrari to school, this may make them outstanding and attractive to others people can feel more confident about themselves Secondly, some luxurious brands are often regarded of high quality,this encourages those who have good financial conditions to keep buying these companies’ items It is apparent that instead of purchasing a product used in several months, people tend to spend a little more money to possess prolonged one

However, I am of the opinion that buying expensive items can be detrimental To begin with, it

is a waste of money because consumers can purchase affordable items with similar functions at

a much lower price For instance, instead of buying an IPhone which costs over 300 dollar, consumers can pay approximately 100 dollar for a Samsung mobile phonewhich has the same quality and functions In addition, rich buyers who own various luxurious possessions are often

in danger of being robbed Some bad guys often look for women and children who carry costly items to rob, and then they can sell them to earn money

In conclusion, purchasing costly clothes, cars and other items from famous brands could be caused by a few reasonsand it is my opinion that this phenomenon is negative

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Estimated Band Score 8.0

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