Thursday, April 13, 2017Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example.. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?. It is true that
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Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It is true that there are a significant number of youngsters who show their admiration towards sports stars In my perspective, this trend may bring various negative impacts on the development of these young people as those celebrities sometimes are not a good model to follow
Firstly, as famous people earn lots of money, they usually waste their fortune for luxurious cars and jewelry The youth who admires these affluent individuals may follow this way of living, which harmfully influences their future For example, a poor university student who shows a great reference for Christina Ronaldo – on of the most famous football player on Earth, may imitate his idol who usually throws parties and wear expensive clothes As a result, instead of focusing on learning, the student just wants to go party and wear pricy clothes Secondly, some fans often get too crazy about their idols, which results in an increasing amount of anti-social behavior In other word, because these people show an overwhelm respect and admiration for ideal models, when other people such as their friends or even their parents say bad things relating to their admired kings and queens, they would instantly go crazy and react in an incredibly impolite way For example, a recent virtual clip posted on Facebook films a daughter who extremely admired Son Tung MPT – a famous singer in Vietnam, swearing and shouting at her parents because they did not allow her to attain the singer’s concert
In conclusion, it seems to me that the trend of admiring rich and well-known would bring several negative effect on young people rather than positive ones
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