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Question in 16/08/2014:Task 2: In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move out of the cities and into regional areas.. ANSWER Many people argue that

Question in 16/08/2014:

Task 2: In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move out of the cities and into regional areas Do you think the advantages outweigh the

disadvantages?

ANSWER

Many people argue that governments should encourage industries and businesses to move from cities tolocal areas =>It is true that many governments have persuaded industries and businesses to relocate to the suburban areas.While I accept that there are some benefits, I believe that these are outweighed by the drawbacks of this trend

On the one hand, there are some advantages offor industries and businesses to move out

of cities and into local areas =>On the one hand, the relocation of factories and companies, without a doubt, may partially help solve many urban problems and improve general living standards.Firstly, if the organizations move out, cities will not be over-populated.Cities also have more spaces for building roads and parks, this helps enhance citizen’s livingstandards Secondly, governments might create jobsfor local people through the moving of bodies into rural areas.For example, in my hometown, Nam Dinh province, when Song Hong

Companymoves to there, many people could seek jobs As a result, it allows them to meet basic human needsand helps to reduce unemployment rate

On the other hand, I believe that there are many problems associated with movement of thebodies into countryside.=>On the other hand, moving industries and businesses to regional areas is problematic up to a point One reason is that the movement of these bodies/

organizations from cities to rural areas costs a great deal with themselves and governments, especially, the industries.They must build new offices and buildings and invest in many things for operatingwhich not all any bodies can afford =>In addition to maintenance cost, companies also need to build new infrastructure and invest in operation cost which may be unaffordable for many businesses Furthermore, that transport infrastructure in local areas is not at their convenience As a result, it is a task of challenge for the organizations to transport their

products to output places, thus local areas become less attractivefor the businesses

In conclusion, I believe that the disadvantages of moving out of cities and into rural areas

of the organizations are more than the advantages

Grade Task

Achievement

7.0 - Introduction:

+ Câu 1 đã paraphrase, viếtlạiđượccâuhỏicủađềbàisửdụngtừvựngcủacủamình + Câu 2 nêurõràngđượcquanđiểmcủabảnthân

- Body:

+ Câu topic sentence đãbámđượcvào ý củacâu 2 phầnmởbàivànêuđược ý baoquátcủađoạnvăn

+ Cáccâu idea 1 đãhỗtrợcho ý của topic sentence

- Conclusion:

Câukếtluận paraphrase đượccâuthứ 2 phầnmởbài

Cohesion and

Coherence

Nhìn chung, bài viết được bố cục “Intro, Body, Conclusion” Intro: 2 câu Body: mỗi body bắt đầu bằng 1 câu topic sentence Có các idea hỗ trợ và giải thích Kết luận: 1 câu paraphrase câu 2 phần Intro -> ăn điểm phần Coherence

- Cohesion:

+ Ý các câu liên quan đến nhau Sửdụng linking words tốt

Vocabulary 7.0

+ Đãcósửdụng topic vocabulary và paraphrase từkhóatrongbài

Grammar 7.0 + Cấutrúccâuđượcsửdụngđadạng, phongphú

+ Chú ý 1 sốlỗingữpháptrongbài