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Briefly describe the reasons for your interest in Tulane University School of Medicine 150 words: Tulane offers one of the key aspects that I am looking for in a medical school, which i

Briefly describe the reasons for your interest in Tulane University School of Medicine (150

words):

Tulane offers one of the key aspects that I am looking for in a medical school, which is a

focus on underserved communities and community health As a physician I aspire to work with

underserved populations both locally and internationally, and as a student at Tulane I have the

option of working at several community clinics Another aspect that attracted me to Tulane is the

culinary medicine course By teaching medical students first-hand about different aspects of

nutrition, this will provide first-hand experience that will allow for me to make not only specific

diet recommendations, but culturally relevant suggestions

A major consideration that I made when selecting medical schools was the environment

and cohesiveness of the student body After talking with current students and alumni about the

inclusiveness of New Orleans and the supportive faculty, I knew I wanted to attended medical

school at Tulane

Comment [k1]: “As a physician” is an

introductory phrase and should be followed with a comma

Comment [k2]: Same with “as a student”, but

set off with commas

Comment [k3]: First hand is used twice Is there

another way to express this? A synonym perhaps

Comment [k4]: “Not only” is always paired with

“but also”