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Overall, it is clear that sales of guitars has always been largest since 2008 and this is expected to remain the case in the future up until 2020, while pianos seem less popular with Bri

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WRITING TASK 1

Model response:

The line chart presented gives us past data and assumed future purchasing figures of

popular musical equipment in the United Kingdom

Overall, it is clear that sales of guitars has always been largest since 2008 and this is

expected to remain the case in the future up until 2020, while pianos seem less popular with British citizens

Looking in closer detail at guitars and percussion instruments it is clear that their sales

varied greatly In 2008, approximately 16% of total sales were for guitars, however drums

were lower at a maximum figure of 13% In the following two years both instruments sales

declined before recovering and seeing modest growth in sales to 14% for drums and 16% for guitars by 2015 After this period, sales of guitars grew and are expected to rapidly rise in

the future whereas drums and percussion predictions are of a levelling off until 2020

Trumpets and pianos have data that shows a more similar trend While trumpets were as

popular as drums in 2008, after this period they were far lower and fluctuated between 10

and 3% until present and should recover to about 5% by 2020 Sales of pianos on the other hand, fell slowly and do not look like increasing above 3%

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Task Commentary:

Overall band 7

Examiner Comments:

The answer includes a clear overview identifying the main trends in the graph presented

Information is well selected and main points are covered with the support of figures The

candidate organises the information in a logical way with a clear progression of points and

there are some good linkers used There are not a lot of spelling mistakes and a range of

vocabulary is used while complex grammatical structures are used accurately and with only few noticeable errors

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WRITING TASK 2

Model response:

In the past few years social media websites and apps such as Facebook and Twitter have

become hugely popular with the youth While using these sites has many benefits such as

being efficient and enjoyable, they also have a few drawbacks which overall makes this

development a bad one

Using apps like Facebook and Twitter are a convenient and fun way to talk with friends and family members Instead of phoning someone and hoping they aren’t busy, sending

messages through these apps can be a better option as the person can receive the

notification when they are free and respond in a timely manner Also, most people are very

busy these days so often can’t answer their phone or meet friends for a coffee or face to

face chat By using Twitter and similar sites, we can still keep in touch with our friends often even if they are far away These sites are often enjoyable to use as well In addition to

chatting, we can send pictures, videos and funny messages to our friend, which strengthen friendship bonds and thus lead to better relationships

However, there are negative aspects of using social sites as the main way to communicate and I believe these far outweigh the benefits mentioned above First, if we only chat using

these sites we can lose our ability to interact well with others face to face This can cause

people to feel depressed, lonely and have mental issues as human are inherently social

creatures who need more interaction than social media sites provide Furthermore, the type

of interaction is not intimate When we meet face-to-face, we can really feel the emotions of others and can connect strongly resulting in far stronger relationships However, via social

media the interaction is far colder and can result in artificial relationships For instance, many people have 500 plus Facebook friends but they don’t actually know these people well or

ever meet them for a coffee or meal Thus, these types of friends and interactions are not

sufficient and surely not a adequate replacement for face to face meetings

To close, while there are some benefits of social sites such as being convenient and fun to

use, we should not ignore the drawback discussed above I recommend that people make

sure to communicate with their loved ones via the phone and in person not only via social

media sites like Facebook

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Task Commentary:

Overall band 7

Examiner Comments:

The writer states a clear position from the start and it is maintained until the end where the

arguments are summed up and the position is restated There is clear progression in the

essay with some good use of cohesive devices and paragraphing is also well handled which helps the reader The ideas are logically organised and are supported with examples or

further information The range of vocabulary includes some less frequent items and the

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meaning is always clear Spelling errors are not common and there is a good range of

grammar structures used

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