The Key to a Winning Sales Message

Sales messages must show, rather than tell, why customers should buy.

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The Key to a Winning Sales Message

Sales messages must show, rather than tell, why customers should buy

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For the past year, I've been rewriting sales messages sent to me by readers of my weekly

newsletter The mistake that keeps cropping up is telling customers how they should feel, rather than showing them why they should feel that way Example:

"This is an exciting new product that's unique in the market!"

The intention behind this kind of phrasing is basically correct After all, it's easier to sell a

product that's exciting and unique than one that's dull and common However, as my

grandfather used to say: "Sayin' so don't make it so."

Simply telling the customer that your product is "exciting" or "unique" (or any other positive

adjective) only communicates that YOU feel that way and that YOU would like the customer to feel that way The message is all about YOU Not the customer

Communicating that your product actually is exciting requires showing them why it's exciting.

To do this, you must present a story or a fact that illustrates (shows) the emotional point

you're trying to make

For example, suppose you believe your product is "exciting" because it can save customers a

whole lot of money Simply telling the customer that your product is "exciting" has all the

emotional wallop of a dead mackerel

By contrast, your customer might actually believe your product is exciting if you show how your

product might positively change the customer's business For example:

"Based upon my research and experience at companies like [one or two famous firms in the customer's industry], I believe we can save you somewhere around $1 million a year."

Needless to say, you'll need to back up that claim with additional facts and success stories

However, rather than telling the customer that your product is "exciting" you've shown the

customer a potential to save $1 million, which actually IS exciting

Similarly, suppose you believe your product is "unique" because you offer the best service and

customer support in the industry Simply telling customers that your product is "unique" doesn't

mean diddly-squat

Instead, you must show the customer exactly why your product is unique and why that

uniqueness is important to the customer For example:

"Our customers have never experienced system outages that might keep them from taking online orders because we're the only vendor that offers 24 hour access fail-safe backup."

That's a fairly techie example, but it works because it shows the customer why your product is unique rather than simply telling the customer that it's so.

With that in mind, it's pretty easy to figure out whether your sales message is any good Print it out and, with a red pen, circle every adjective and adverb (i.e telling) Then underline any facts that might actually spark an emotional response (i.e showing)

Now rewrite the message so that it shows rather than tells Here's a real life example:

By editing out the biz-blab and showing rather than telling, we end up with the following

message, which is far more crisp and compelling:

"Based on my research, I believe we can save you up to 20% on your print services, because we're part of the world's largest print services company thus can pass the economies of scale along to you."

The rewritten message will need to be buttressed with some stories about existing customers

and a credible source for the "world's largest" claim However, it does show, rather than tell, why

the customer should get excited about hiring the vendor

Geoffrey James writes the Sales Source column on Inc.com, the world's most visited sales-oriented blog His newly published book is Business to Business Selling: Power Words and Strategies From the World's Top Sales Experts @Sales_Source