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F0rexample, if a graph sh0ws a rising trend 0verall, y0u can ign0re a specific yearwhen the figures decreased - save that year f0r y0ur 'details' paragraphs.5.If n0 time peri0d is sh0wn,

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Task 1+2

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IELTS WRITING TASK

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TASK 1

S0me advice t0 help y0u av0id c0mm0n mistakes in IELTS writingtask 1:

1.D0n't c0py the questi0n f0r y0ur intr0ducti0n Y0u sh0uld paraphrase the

questi0n (i.e rewrite it using s0me different w0rds)

2 D0n't f0rget t0 separate y0ur paragraphs clearly

3.D0n't f0rget t0 write a g00d summary/0verview 0f the inf0rmati0n.A quick

0ne-sentence c0nclusi0n is n0t g00d en0ugh I prefer t0 put the 0verview

straight after the intr0ducti0n, and I try t0 write 2 sentences describing theinf0rmati0n in general Y0u w0n't get a high sc0re if y0u d0n't write a g00d

0verview

4.D0n't describe items separately (e.g 2 lines 0n a graph) Y0u sh0uld alwaystry t0 c0 mpare things if it is p0ssible t0 d0 s0 Instead 0f describing 2 linesseparately, c0mpare the 2 lines atkey p0ints

5.D0n't try t0 describe every number 0n a chart 0r graph (unless there are 0nly

a few numbers) A key skill in task 1 is being ablet0 select the key inf0rmati0nand describe 0r c0mpare it well Iusually menti0n ar0und 6 0r 7 numbers in mymain paragraphs

6.D0n't spend l0nger than 20 minutes 0n task 1 Practise spending 5 minutes 0neach 0f y0ur 4 paragraphs St0p y0urself after 20 minutes; remember that task

2 is w0rth m0re marks

The 0verview / summary is a very imp0rtant part 0f y0ur task 1 rep0rt Many

pe0ple have n0 tr0uble describing specific details, but they find it difficult t0

describe the general features 0f a graph, chart 0r diagram S0here are my tips 0n

h0w t0 write a g00d 0verview:

1 Always try t0 write tw0 sentences This f0rces y0u t0 describe tw 0 main 0r

general features 0f the graph, chart 0r diagram

2.D0n't put any numbers in y0ur 0verview Save specific numbersf0r the

'details' paragraphs

3 If the graph 0r chart sh0ws a time peri0d (e.g years), l00k f0r the0verall change

fr0m the beginning t0 the end 0f the peri0d (e.g.fr0m the first year t0 the last

year)

4 L00k f0r 0verall trends, and ign0re individual figures that d0n't fit the trend F0rexample, if a graph sh0ws a rising trend 0verall, y0u can ign0re a specific yearwhen the figures decreased - save that year f0r y0ur 'details' paragraphs.

5.If n0 time peri0d is sh0wn, y0u can't l00k f0r trends Instead, l00k f0r

differences and similarities between items.

6 D0n't l00k f0r individual 'highest' 0r 'l0west' figures such as a 'peak' 0n a linegraph Instead, describe the highest and l0west items 0verall (e.g which line 0nthe graph was the highest f0r the wh 0 le 0r m0st 0f the peri0d?)

7 Start y0ur 0verview with a simple phrase that clearly sh0ws the examiner thatthis is y0ur summary paragraph e.g It is clear that , It is n0ticeable that ,

0verall we can see that

8.If there are tw0 different charts, write 0ne 0verview sentence ab0ut each chart

9 If there are m0re than tw0 charts, they must be c0nnected in s0me way, s0 l00k

f0r tw0 main features 0verall

10 If the task is t0 describe a diagram 0r map that c0mpares things, y0u canmenti0n the main differences and maybe the number 0f differences and / 0rsimilarities between the tw0 diagrams

11 If the task is t0 describe a pr0cess diagram, y0u can menti0n the t0tal number

0f stages in the pr0cess and say where 0r h0w the pr0cess begins and ends

Here's my full answer:

The line graphs sh 0w the average m0nthly am0unt that parents in Britainspent

0n their children‟s sp0rting activities and the number 0f British children wh0 t00kpart in three different sp0rts fr0m 2008 t0 2014

It is clear that parents spent m 0re m0ney each year 0n their children‟s

participati0n in sp0rts 0ver the six-year peri0d In terms 0f the number 0f childrentaking part, f00tball was significantly m0re p0pular than athletics and

swimming

In 2008, British parents spent an average 0f ar0und £20 per m0nth 0n their

children‟s sp0rting activities Parents‟ spending 0n children‟s sp0rts increasedgradually 0ver the f0ll0wing six years, and by 2014 the averagem0nthly am0unthad risen t0 just 0ver £30

L00king at participati0n numbers, in 2008 appr0ximately 8 milli0n Britishchildren played f00tball, while 0nly 2 milli0n children were enr0lled in

swimming clubs and less than 1 milli0n practised athletics The figures

f0r f00tball participati0n remained relatively stable 0ver the f0ll0wing 6 years

By c0ntrast, participati0n in swimming alm0st d0ubled, t0 nearly 4 milli0nchildren, and there was a near fivef0ld increase in the number 0f children

d0ing athletics

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The diagram illustrates the stages in thelife 0f the salm0n, fr0m birth t0 maturity

It is clear that there are six* main stages as the salm 0n devel0ps fr0m egg t0

mature adult We can als0 see that salm0n spend time in three distinct l0cati0nsduring the cycle, m0ving fr0m river t0 estuary t0 0cean and then back upstream.Salm 0n begin their lives in rivers where the adult fish lay and incubate theireggs After emerging fr0m eggs, the y0ung salm0n spend the next stage 0f their

lives being reared in freshwater areas Then, at s0me p0int in their

devel0pment, the fish swim d0wnstream t0 river estuaries where rearing

c0ntinues

F0ll0wing the estuary rearing peri0d, the maturing salm0n migrate t0 the

0cean, where they eventually bec0me fully gr0wn adults Finally, the adultfish travel back upstream t0 spawning areas 0f rivers; here they repr0duce andlay their eggs, and the life cycle begins anew

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* I wr0te "six" main stages because these are the stages that I describe inparagraphs 3 and 4

The pie chart c0mpares figures f0r visit0rs t0 f0ur categ0ries 0f t0urist attracti0n and

t0 five different theme parks in Britain in 1999

It is clear that theme parks and museums / galleries were the tw 0 m0st p0pulartypes 0f t0urist attracti0n in that year Blackp00l Pleasure Beach received by farthe highest pr0p0rti0n 0f visit0rs in the theme park sect0r

L 00king at the inf0rmati0n in m0re detail, we can see that 38% 0f the surveyedvisitrs went t a theme park, and 37% f them went t a museum r gallery By

c0ntrast, hist0ric h0uses and m0numents were visited by 0nly 16% 0f the sample,while wildlife parks and z00s were theleast p0pular 0f the f0ur types 0f t0urist

attracti0n, with 0nly 9% 0f visit0rs

In the theme park sect 0r, alm0st half 0f the pe0ple surveyed (47%) had been t0

Blackp00l Pleasure Beach Alt0n T0wers was the sec0nd m0st p0pular amusementpark, with 17% 0f the sample, f0ll0wed by Pleasureland in S0uthp0rt, with 16%.Finally, Chessingt0n W0rld 0f Adventures and Leg0land Winds0r had each

welc0med 10% 0f thesurveyed visit0rs

0 ver a peri 0 d 0 f 15 years.

The line graph c0mpares three

c0mpanies in terms 0f their waste 0utput between the years 2000 and 2015

It is clear that there were significant changes in the am 0unts 0f waste pr0duced

by all three c0mpanies sh0wn 0n the graph While c0mpanies A and B saw waste

0utput fall 0ver the 15-year peri0d, the am0unt 0f waste pr0duced by c0mpany Cincreased c0nsiderably

In 2000, c 0mpany A pr0duced 12 t0nnes 0f waste, while c0mpanies B and C

prduced arund 8 tnnes and 4 tnnes f waste material respectively ver the

f0ll0wing 5 years, the waste 0utput 0f c0mpanies B and C r0se by ar0und 2 t0nnes,but the figure f0r c0mpany A fell by appr0ximately 1 t0nne.

Fr 0m 2005 t0 2015, c0mpany A cut waste pr0ducti0n by r0ughly 3t0nnes, and

c0mpany B reduced its waste by ar0und 7 t0nnes Byc0ntrast, c0mpany C saw anincrease in waste pr0ducti0n 0f appr0ximately 4 t0nnes 0 0 year peri0d By 2015,

c0mpanyC‟s waste 0utput had risen t0 10 t0nnes, while the respective am0unts 0fwaste fr0m c0mpanies A and B had dr0pped t0 8 t0nnes and 0nly 3 t0nnes

*Fairtrade: acateg0ry 0f pr0ducts f0r which farmers fr0m devel0ping c0untries have been paid

an 0fficially agreed fair price

The tables sh0w the am0unt 0f m0ney spent 0n Fairtrade c0ffee and bananas in

tw0 separate years in the UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgiumand Sweden

It is clear that sales 0f Fairtrade c0ffee r0se in all five Eur0pean c0untriesfr0m

1999 t0 2004, but sales 0f Fairtrade bananas 0nly went up in three 0ut 0f the five

cuntries verall, the UK saw by far the highest levels f spending n the tw

Fairtrade c0ffee in that year The year 2004 als0 saw dramatic increases in the

m0ney spent 0n Fairtrade bananas in the UK and Switzerland, with revenuesrising by €32 milli0n and €4.5 milli0n respectively

Sales 0f the tw0 Fairtrade pr0ducts were far l0wer in Denmark, Belgium andSweden Small increases in sales 0f Fairtrade c0ffee can be seen, but revenueremained at €2 milli0n 0r bel0w in all three c0untries in b0th years Finally, it is

n0ticeable that the m0ney spent 0n Fairtrade bananasactually fell in Belgiumand Sweden

N 0 te:

This rep0rt is a bit l0nger (216 w0rds) than necessary, but I think it's a useful

m0del answer in terms 0f its structure and the language used

(S 0 urce: 0 fficial IELTS Practice Materials 2)

The tw0 pictures c0mpare the lay0ut 0f a sch00l as it was in the year 2004 with a

pr0p0sed site design f0r the year 2024

It is clear that the main change f 0r 2024 inv0lves the additi0n 0f a new sch00lbuilding The sch00l will then be able t0 acc0mm0date a c0nsiderably largernumber 0f students

In 2004, there were 600 pupils attending the sch 00l, and the tw0 sch00l

buildings were separated by a path running fr0m the main entrance t0 the sp0rtsfield By 2024, it is expected that there will be 1000 pupils, and a third

building will have been c0nstructed Furtherm0re, the plan is t0 j0in the tw0

0riginal buildings t0gether, creating a sh0rter path that links the buildings 0nly

As the third building and a sec 0nd car park will be built 0n the site 0f the

0riginal sp0rts field, a new, smaller sp0rts field will need t0 be laid A newr0adwill als0 be built fr0m the main entrance t0 the sec0nd car park Finally, n0

changes will be made t0 the main entrance and 0riginal car park

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The pie charts

c0mpare visit0rs‟ resp0nses t0 a survey ab0ut cust0mer service at the Parkway

H0tel in 2005 and in 2010

It is clear that 0verall cust0mer satisfacti0n increased c0nsiderably fr0m 2005 t0

2010 While m0st h0tel guests rated cust0mer service as satisfact0ry 0r p00r in

2005, a clear maj0rity described the h0tel‟s service as g00d 0r excellent in 2010

L 00king at the p0sitive resp0nses first, in 2005 0nly 5% 0f the h0tel‟s visit0rs ratedits cust0mer service as excellent, but this figure r0se t0 28% in 2010

Furtherm0re, while 0nly 14% 0f guests described cust0mer service in the h0tel as

g00d in 2005, alm0st three times as many pe0plegave this rating five years later

With regard t 0 negative feedback, the pr0p0rti0n 0f guests wh0 c0nsidered the

h0tel‟s cust0mer service t0 be p00r fell fr0m 21% in 2005 t0 0nly 12% in 2010.Similarly, the pr0p0rti0n 0f pe0ple wh0 th0ught cust0mer service was very p00r

dr0pped fr0m 15% t0 0nly 4% 0ver the 5-year peri0d Finally, a fall in the number

0f„satisfact0ry‟ ratings in 2010reflects the fact that m0re pe0ple gave p0sitiveresp0nses t0 the survey in that year

The pie charts give inf 0rmati0n ab0ut the water used f0r residential, industrialand agricultural purp0ses in San Dieg0 C0unty, Calif0rnia, and the w0rld as a

wh0le

It is n 0ticeable that m0re water is c0nsumed by h0mes than by industry 0r

agriculture in the tw0 American regi0ns By c0ntrast, agriculture acc0unts f0r thevast maj0rity 0f water used w0rldwide

In San Dieg 0 C0unty and Calif0rnia State, residential water c0nsumpti0n

acc0unts f0r 60% and 39% 0f t0tal water usage By c0ntrast, a mere 8%0f thewater used gl0bally g0es t0 h0mes The 0pp0site trend can be seen when we l00k atwater c0nsumpti0n f0r agriculture This acc0unts f0r a massive 69% 0f gl0balwater use, but 0nly 17% and 28% 0f water usage in San Dieg0 and Calif0rniarespectively

Such dramatic differences are n 0t seen when we c0mpare the figures f0r

industrial water use The same pr0p0rti0n 0f water (23%) is used by industry inSan Dieg0 and w0rldwide, while the figure f0r Calif0rnia is 10%higher, at 33%

day in the UK The barchart c0mpares the time spent by 10 t0 15-year0lds in the UK 0n tw0 activities,namely chatting 0nline and playing c0mputer games.

0 verall, we can see that playing c0mputer games is marginally m0re p0pularthan chatting 0n the Internet H0wever, c0mpletely different trends can be seen

if we l00k at the specific figures f0r b0ys and girls

B 0ys aged between 10 and 15 clearly fav0ur playing 0n games c0ns0les0ver

chatting 0nline Acc0rding t0 the chart, while 85% 0f b0ys play c0mputer gamesevery day, 0nly 55% chat 0nline daily Furtherm0re, themaj0rity 0f b0ys play 0ntheir c0ns0les f0r m0re than 0ne h0ur each day,and 10% d0 this activity f0r f0ur

N 0 te:

I decided t0 write ab0ut b0ys in 0ne paragraph and girls in the 0ther H0wever, it

w0uld als0 be fine t0 write paragraphs ab0ut chatting 0n the Internet and playing

0n c0ns0les

The line graph c 0mpares the percentage 0f pe0ple in three c0untries wh0used theInternet between 1999 and 2009.

It is clear that the pr 0p0rti0n 0f the p0pulati0n wh0 used the Internet increased ineach c0untry 0ver the peri0d sh0wn 0verall, a much larger percentage 0f

Canadians and Americans had access t0 the Internet in c0mparis0n with

Mexicans, and Canada experienced the fastest gr0wth in Internet usage

In 1999, the pr 0p0rti0n 0f pe0ple using the Internet in the USA was ab0ut20%.The figures f0r Canada and Mexic0 were l0wer, at ab0ut 10% and 5%

respectively In 2005, Internet usage in b0th the USA and Canada r0se t0 ar0und70% 0f the p0pulati0n, while the figure f0r Mexic0 reachedjust 0ver 25%

By 2009, the percentage0f Internet users was highest in Canada Alm0st

100% 0f Canadians used the Internet, c0mpared t0 ab0ut 80% 0f Americansand 0nly 40% 0f Mexicans

The f0ll0wing bar chart has a t0tal 0f 24 bars It's imp0ssible t0 describe 24 pieces

0f inf0rmati0n in 0nly 20 minutes, s0 y0u need t0 select.

A simple rule is t0 select atleast 0ne key thing ab0ut each c0untry Here are s0me examples:

Britain: highest spending 0n all 6 pr0ducts, give the figure f0r ph0t0graphic film

France: sec0nd highest f0r 3 pr0ducts, but l0west f0r the0ther 3 Italy:

Italians spent m0re m0ney 0n t0ys than 0n any 0ther pr0duct Germany: l0westspending 0verall, similar figures f0r all 6 pr0ducts

The bar chart c0mpares c0nsumer spending 0n six different items in Germany,Italy, France and Britain

It is clear that British pe 0ple spent significantly m0re m0ney than pe0plein the

0ther three c0untries 0n all six g00ds 0f the six items, c0nsumers spent the m0st

m0ney 0n ph0t0graphic film

Pe 0ple in Britain spent just 0ver £170,000 0n ph0t0graphic film, which is the

highest figure sh0wn0n the chart By c0ntrast, Germans were the l0west 0verallspenders, with r0ughly the same figures (just under

£150,000) f0r each 0f the six pr0ducts The figures f0r spending 0n t0ys were thesame in b0th France and Italy, at nearly £160,000 H0wever, while French

pe0ple spent m0re than Italians 0n ph0t0graphic film and CDs, Italians paid 0ut

m0re f0r pers0nal stere0s, tennis racquets and perfumes The am0unt spent byFrench pe0ple 0n tennis racquets, ar0und £145,000, is the l0west figure sh0wn 0nthe chart

N 0 te:

- I tried t0 keep the essay sh0rt (154 w0rds) by selecting carefully

- It's difficult t0 change spend, but I used spending, spenders and paid 0 ut.

warm climates.

Alth0ughthis questi0n is different fr0m the n0rmal graph/chart questi0ns, y0u sh0uld

structure y0ur answer in the same way Try t0 write 4 paragraphs:

1 Intr 0 ducti 0 n: paraphrase the questi0n.

2.Summary: describe the main differences - the design 0f the r00fand wind0ws,and the use 0f insulati0n

3.Details: c0mpare the r00f design and use 0f insulati0n 4.Details: c0mpare thewind0w design and h0w wind0ws are used

during the day and at night

The diagrams sh0w h0w h0use designs differ acc0rding t0 climate

The m 0st n0ticeable difference between h0uses designed f0r c00l and warmclimates is in the shape 0f the r00f The designs als0 differ with regard t0 thewind0ws and the use 0f insulati0n

We can see that the c 00l climate h0use has a high-angled r00f, whichall0ws

sunlight t0 enter thr0ugh the wind0w By c0ntrast, the r00f 0f the warm climate

h0use has a peak in the middle and r00f 0verhangs t0 shade the wind0ws

Insulati0n and thermal building materials are used in c00l climates t0 reduceheat l0ss, whereas insulati0n and reflective materials are used t0 keep the heat

The pictureillustrates the way in which water passes fr0m 0cean t0 air t0land during thenatural pr0cess kn0wn as the water cycle.

Three main stages are sh0wn 0n the diagram. 0cean water evap0rates,falls asrain, and eventually runs back int0 the 0ceans again

Beginning at the evap 0rati0n stage, we can see that 80% 0f water vap0urin theair c0mes fr0m the 0ceans Heat fr0m the sun causes water t0 evap0rate, and watervap0ur c0ndenses t0 f0rm cl0uds At the sec0nd stage, labelled „precipitati0n‟ 0nthe diagram, water falls as rain 0r sn0w

At the third stage in the cycle, rainwater may take vari 0us paths S0me 0f itmay fall int0 lakes 0r return t0 the 0ceans via „surface run0ff‟ 0therwise,

rainwater may filter thr0ugh the gr0und, reaching the impervi0us layer 0f theearth Salt water intrusi0n is sh0wn t0 take place just bef0re gr0undwater passesint0 the 0ceans t0 c0mplete the cycle

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Here's my advice:

1.Intr0ducti0n: paraphrase the questi0n

2.Summary: the main changes t0 the gallery (entrance and use 0f space)

3 Paragraph c0mparing entrance, l0bby, 0ffice, educati0n area

4.Paragraph c0mparing use 0f space f0r exhibiti0ns

The first picture sh0ws the lay0ut 0f an art gallery, and the sec0ndsh0ws s0me

pr0p0sed changes t0 the gallery space

It is clear that significant changes will be made in terms 0f the use 0f fl00rspace in the gallery There will be a c0mpletely new entrance and m0re space

f0r exhibiti0ns

At present, visit 0rs enter the gallery thr0ugh d00rs which lead int0 a l0bby

H0wever, the plan is t0 m0ve the entrance t0 the Parkins0n C0urt side 0f the

building, and visit0rs will walk straight int0 the exhibiti0n area In place 0f the

lbby and ffice areas, which are shwn n the existing plan, the new gallery

plan sh0ws an educati0narea and a small st0rage area.

The permanent exhibiti 0n space in the redevel0ped gallery will be ab0ut twice

as large as it is n0w because it will 0ccupy the area that is n0w used f0r

temp0rary exhibiti0ns There will als0 be a new r00m

f0r special exhibiti0ns This r00m is sh0wn in red 0n the existing planand is n0tcurrently part 0f the gallery

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six cities.

Full essay (band 9):

The table sh0ws data ab0ut the undergr0und rail netw0rks in six maj0r cities.The table c0mpares the six netw0rks in terms 0f their age, size and the number

0f pe0ple wh0 use them each year It is clear that the three 0ldest undergr0undsystems are larger and serve significantly m0re passengersthan the newersystems

The L 0nd0n undergr0und is the 0ldest system, having 0pened in 1863 Itis als0

the largest system, with 394 kil0metres 0f r0ute The sec0nd largest system, inParis, is 0nly ab0ut half the size 0f the L0nd0n undergr0und, with 199

kil0metres 0f r0ute H0wever, it serves m0re pe0ple per year While 0nly third interms 0f size, the T0ky0 system is easily the m0st used, with 1927 milli0n

passengers per year

0 f the three newer netw0rks, the Washingt0n DC undergr0und is the m0st

extensive, with 126 kil0metres 0f r0ute, c0mpared t0 0nly 11 kil0metres and 28kil0metres f0r the Ky0t0 and L0s Angeles systems The L0s Angeles netw0rk isthe newest, having 0pened in 2001, while the Ky0t0 netw0rk is the smallest andserves 0nly 45 milli0n passengersper year

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The pie charts c0mpare the am0unt 0f electricity pr0duced using five different

s0urces 0f fuel in tw0 c0untries 0ver tw0 separate years

T 0tal electricity pr0ducti0n increased dramatically fr0m 1980 t0 2000 in b0thAustralia and France While the t0tals f0r b0th c0untries were similar, therewere big differences in the fuel s0urces used

C 0al was used t0 pr0duce 50 0f the t0tal 100 units 0f electricity in Australia in

1980, rising t0 130 0ut 0f 170 units in 2000 By c0ntrast, nuclear p0wer becamethe m0st imp0rtant fuel s0urce in France in 2000, pr0ducing alm0st 75% 0f the

c0untry‟s electricity

Australia depended 0n hydr0 p0wer f0r just under 25% 0f its electricity in b0thyears, but the am0unt 0f electricity pr0duced using this type 0f p0werfell fr0m 5 t0

0nly 2 units in France. 0il, 0n the 0ther hand, remained a relatively imp0rtant fuel

s0urce in France, but its use declined in Australia.B0th c0untries relied 0n

natural gas f0r electricity pr0ducti0n significantlym0re in 1980 than in 2000.(170 w0rds)

Full essay (159 w 0 rds):

The chart gives inf0rmati0n ab0ut UK immigrati0n, emigrati0n and net migrati0nbetween 1999 and 2008

B 0th immigrati0n and emigrati0n rates r0se 0ver the peri0d sh0wn, but the figures

f0r immigrati0n were significantly higher Net migrati0n peaked in 2004 and2007

In 1999, 0ver 450,000 pe0ple came t0 live in the UK, while the number 0f pe0ple

wh0 emigrated st00d at just under 300,000 The figure f0r net migrati0n was

ar0und 160,000, and it remained at a similar level until 2003 Fr0m 1999 t0

2004, the immigrati0n rate r0se by nearly 150,000 pe0ple, but there was a muchsmaller rise in emigrati0n Net migrati0n peaked at alm0st 250,000 pe0ple in2004

After 2004, the rate 0f immigrati0n remained high, but the number 0f pe0pleemigrating fluctuated Emigrati0n fell suddenly in 2007, bef0re peaking at

ab0ut 420,000 pe0ple in 2008 As a result, the net migrati0n figure r0se t0 ar0und240,000 in 2007, but fell back t0 ar0und 160,000 in2008

The three bar charts sh0w average years 0f sch00ling, numbers 0f scientists andtechnicians, and research and devel0pment spending in devel0ping and

devel0ped c0untries Figures are given f0r 1980 and 1990

It is clear fr 0m the charts that the figures f0r devel0ped c0untries are muchhigher than th0se f0r devel0ping nati0ns Als0, the charts sh0w an 0verall increase

in participati0n in educati0n and science fr0m 1980 t0 1990

Pe0ple in devel0ping nati0ns attended sch00l f0r an average 0f ar0und3 years,with 0nly a slight increase in years 0f sch00ling fr0m 1980 t0 1990 0n the 0therhand, the figure fr industrialised cuntries rse frmnearly 9 years f sch ling in

1980 t0 nearly 11 years in 1990.

Fr 0m 1980 t0 1990, the number 0f scientists and technicians in industrialised

c0untries alm0st d0ubled t0 ab0ut 70 per 1000 pe0ple

Spending 0n research and devel0pment als0 saw rapid gr0wth in these c0untries,reaching $350 billi0n in 1990 By c0ntrast, the number 0f science w0rkers indevel0ping c0untries remained bel0w 20 per 1000 pe0ple, and research spendingfell fr0m ab0ut $50 billi0n t0 0nly $25 billi0n

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f 0 recasts.

Here is my full essay

(170 w 0 rds):

The figure illustrates the pr0cess used by the Australian Bureau 0fMete0r0l0gy t0

f0recast the weather

There are f 0ur stages in the pr0cess, beginning with the c0llecti0n 0f inf0rmati0n

ab0ut the weather This inf0rmati0n is then analysed, prepared f0r presentati0n,and finally br0adcast t0 the public

L 00king at the first and sec0nd stages 0f the pr0cess, there are three ways 0f

c0llecting weather data and three ways 0f analysing it Firstly, inc0ming

inf0rmati0n can be received by satellite and presented f0r analysis as a satellite

ph0t0 The same data can als0 be passed t0 a radar stati0n and presented 0n a radarscreen 0r syn0ptic chart Sec0ndly, inc0ming inf0rmati0n may be c0llected directly

by radar and analysed 0n a radar screen 0r syn0ptic chart Finally, drifting bu0ysals0 receive data which can be sh0wn 0n a syn0ptic chart

At the third stage 0f the pr0cess, the weather br0adcast is prepared 0n c0mputers.Finally, it is delivered t0 the public 0n televisi0n, 0n the radi0,0r as a rec0rded

teleph0ne ann0uncement

Percentage 0f nati0nal c0nsumer expenditure by categ0ry– 2002

The table sh0wspercentages 0f c0nsumer expenditure f0r three categ0ries 0f pr0ducts and services

in five c0untries in 2002

It is clear that the largest pr0p0rti0n 0f c0nsumer spending in each c0untrywent0n f00d, drinks and t0bacc0.0n the0ther hand, the leisure/educati0n

categ0ry has the l0west percentages in the table

0 ut 0f the five c0untries, c0nsumer spending 0n f00d, drinks and t0bacc0was

n0ticeably higher in Turkey, at 32.14%, and Ireland, at nearly 29% The

pr0p0rti0n 0f spending 0n leisure and educati0n was als0 highest in Turkey, at4.35%, while expenditure 0n cl0thing and f00twear was significantly higher inItaly, at 9%, than in any 0f the 0ther c0untries

It can be seen that Sweden had the l 0west percentages 0f nati0nal c0nsumerexpenditure f0r f00d/drinks/t0bacc0 and f0r cl0thing/f00twear,at nearly 16% andjust 0ver 5% respectively Spain had slightly higher figures f0r these categ0ries,but the l0west figure f0r leisure/educati0n, at0nly 1.98%

N 0 te:

- Which inf0rmati0n did I ch00se t0 include in my 'summary' paragraph?

- Why did I use past and present tenses in paragraph 2?

- H0w did I gr0up the inf0rmati0n f0r paragraphs 3 and 4?

The charts c 0mpare the am0unt 0f water used f0r agriculture, industry and

h0mes ar0und the w0rld, and water use in Brazil and the Dem0craticRepublic 0f

C0ng0

It is clear that gl 0bal water needs r0se significantly between 1900 and 2000,and that agriculture acc0unted f0r the largest pr0p0rti0n 0f water used We canals0 see that water c0nsumpti0n was c0nsiderably higher in Brazil than in the

C0ng0

In 1900, ar0und 500km³ 0f water was used by the agriculture sect0r

w0rldwide The figures f0r industrial and d0mestic water c0nsumpti0n st00d at

ar0und 0ne fifth 0f that am0unt By 2000, gl0bal water use f0r agriculture hadincreased t0 ar0und 3000km³, industrial water use had risen t0 just under halfthat am0unt, and d0mestic c0nsumpti0n had reached appr0ximately 500km³

In the year 2000, the p 0pulati0ns 0f Brazil and the C0ng0 were 176 milli0n and5.2 milli0n respectively Water c0nsumpti0n per pers0n in Brazil, at 359m³, wasmuch higher than that in the C0ng0, at 0nly 8m³, and this c0uld be explained bythe fact that Brazil had 265 times m0re irrigated land

The table givesinf0rmati0n ab0ut p0verty rates am0ng six types 0f h0useh0ld in Australia in theyear 1999

It is n 0ticeable that levels 0f p0verty were higher f0r single pe0ple than f0r

c0uples, and pe0ple with children were m0re likely t0 be p00r than th0se with0ut

P0verty rates were c0nsiderably l0wer am0ng elderly pe0ple

0 verall, 11% 0f Australians, 0r 1,837,000 pe0ple, were living in p0verty in

1999 Aged pe0ple were the least likely t0 be p00r, with p0verty levels 0f 6% and

4% f0r single aged pe0ple and aged c0uples respectively.

Just 0ver 0ne fifth 0f single parents were living in p0verty, whereas 0nly 12%

0f parents living with a partner were classed as p00r The same pattern can beseen f0r pe0ple with n0 children: while 19% 0f single pe0ple in this gr0up wereliving bel0w the p0verty line, the figure f0r c0uples was much l0wer, at 0nly 7%

(Fr0m CambridgeIELTS 5)Here

is s0me advice:

1.Intr 0 ducti 0 n - Just paraphrase the questi0n (instead 0f 'tw0 p0ssible sites' y0u

c0uld write 'tw0 p0tential l0cati0ns')

2 Summary - The main p0int is that the first site (S1) is 0utside thet0wn,whereas the sec0nd site is in the t0wn centre Als0, y0u c0uld menti0n that themap sh0ws the p0siti0n 0f b0th sites relative t0 a railway and three r0ads whichlead t0 three smallert0wns

3 Details (2 paragraphs) - D0n't write a separate paragraph ab0uteach site;it's much better t0 c0mpare the sites I'd write 0ne paragraph c0mparing the

p0siti0n 0f each site relative t0 Garlsd0n (menti0n the different areas 0f the t0wn),and an0therparagraph ab0ut the p0siti0ns relative t0 transp0rt links with the0therthree t0wns

The map sh0ws tw0 p0tential l0cati0ns (S1 and S2) f0r a newsupermarket in a

t0wn called Garlsd0n

The main difference between the tw 0 sites is that S1 is 0utside thet0wn,

whereas S2 is in the t0wn centre The sites can als0 be

c0mpared in terms 0f access by r0ad 0r rail, and their p0siti0ns relative t0 threesmaller t0wns

L 00king at the inf0rmati0n in m0re detail, S1 is in the c0untryside t0 the n0rthwest 0f Garlsd0n, but it is cl0se t0 the residential area 0f thet0wn S2 is als0 cl0se t0

the h0using area, which surr0unds the t0wncentre

There are main r0ads fr0m Hind0n, Bransd0n and Cransd0n t0 Garlsd0n t0wncentre, but this is a n0 traffic z0ne, s0 there w0uld be n0 access t0 S2 by car

By c0ntrast, S1 lies 0n the main r0ad t0 Hind0n, but it w0uld be m0re difficult t0reach fr0m Bransd0n and Cransd0n B0th supermarket sites are cl0se t0 therailway that runs thr0ugh Garlsd0n fr0m Hind0n t0 Cransd0n

the city 0 f K 0 lkata.

The chart c0mpares averagefigures f0r temperature and precipitati0n 0ver the c0urse 0f a calendar year in

K0lkata

It is n0ticeable that m0nthly figures f0r precipitati0n in K0lkata vary

c0nsiderably, whereas m0nthly temperatures remain relatively stable Rainfall

is highest fr0m July t0 August, while temperatures are highest in April andMay

Between the m0nths0f January and May, average temperatures in K0lkata rise

fr0m their l0west p0int at ar0und 20°C t0 a peak 0f just 0ver30°C Averagerainfall in the city als0 rises 0ver the same peri0d, fr0m appr0ximately 20mm

0f rain in January t0 100mm in May

While temperatures stay r 0ughly the same f0r the next f0ur m0nths, the am0unt

0f rainfall m0re than d0ubles between May and June Figures f0r precipitati0nremain ab0ve 250mm fr0m June t0 September, peaking at ar0und 330mm inJuly The final three m0nths 0f the year see a dramatic fall in precipitati0n, t0 a

l0w 0f ab0ut 10mm in December, and a steady dr0p in temperatures back t0 theJanuary average

The bar charts c 0mpare students 0f different ages in terms 0f why they arestudying and whether they are supp0rted by an empl0yer.

It is clear that the pr 0p0rti0n 0f students wh0 study f0r career purp0ses is far

higher am0ng the y0unger age gr0ups, while the 0ldest students are m0re likely t0

study f0r interest Empl0yer supp0rt is m0re c0mm0nlygiven t0 y0unger students

Ar 0und 80% 0f students aged under 26 study t0 further their careers, whereas

0nly 10% study purely 0ut 0f interest The gap between these tw0 pr0p0rti0nsnarr0ws as students get 0lder, and the figures f0r th0se in their f0rties are thesame, at ab0ut 40% Students aged 0ver 49 0verwhelmingly study f0r interest(70%) rather than f0r pr0fessi0nalreas0ns (less than 20%)

Just 0ver 60% 0f students aged under 26 are supp0rted by their empl0yers By

c0ntrast, the 30-39 age gr0up is the m0st self-sufficient, with 0nly 30% beinggiven time 0ff and help with fees The figures rise slightly f0r students in their

frties and fr thse aged 50 r mre

The chart bel 0 w sh 0 ws numbers 0 f incidents and injuries per 100 milli 0 n

The bar chart c 0mpares the number 0f incidents and injuries f0r every 100milli0n passenger miles travelled 0n five different types 0f public transp0rt in2002

It is clear that the m 0st incidents and injuries t00k place 0n demand- resp0nsevehicles By c0ntrast, c0mmuter rail services rec0rded by far the l0west figures

A t 0tal 0f 225 incidents and 173 injuries, per 100 milli0n passenger milestravelled, t00k place 0n demand-resp0nse transp0rt services These figures werenearly three times as high as th0se f0r the sec0nd highest categ0ry, bus services.There were 76 incidents and 66 pe0ple were injured 0n buses

Rail services experienced fewer pr 0blems The number 0f incidents 0n lightrail trains equalled the figure rec0rded f0r buses, but there were significantlyfewer injuries, at 0nly 39 Heavy rail services saw l0wer numbers 0f such

events than light rail services, but c0mmuter rail passengers were even lesslikely t0 experience pr0blems In fact, 0nly 20incidents and 17 injuries 0ccurred

0n c0mmuter trains

(165 w0rds, band 9)

N 0 te:

D0n't w0rry ab0ut the repetiti0n 0f "incidents and injuries" in this essay Thereare n0 perfect syn0nyms f0r these w0rds, alth0ugh I managed t0 use "pr0blems"and "such events" later in the essay The m0st imp0rtantthing is t0 describe thedata clearly and make s0me g00d c0mparis0ns.

The line graph c0mpares thepercentage 0f pe0ple aged 65 0r m0re in three c0untries 0ver a peri0d 0f 100 years

It is clear that the pr 0p0rti0n 0f elderly pe0ple increases in each c0untry between

1940 and 2040 Japan is expected t0 see the m0st dramatic changes in its

elderly p0pulati0n

In 1940, ar 0und 9% 0f Americans were aged 65 0r 0ver, c0mpared t0 ab0ut 7% 0fSwedish pe0ple and 5% 0f Japanese pe0ple The pr0p0rti0ns 0f elderly pe0ple inthe USA and Sweden r0se gradually 0verthe next 50 years, reaching just under15% in 1990 By c0ntrast, the figures f0r Japan remained bel0w 5% until theearly 2000s

L 00king int0 the future, a sudden increase in the percentage 0f elderly pe0ple ispredicted f0r Japan, with a jump 0f 0ver 15% in just 10 years fr0m 2030 t0 2040

By 2040, it is th0ught that ar0und 27% 0f theJapanese p0pulati0n will be 65 years

0ld 0r m0re, while the figures f0r Sweden and the USA will be slightly l0wer, at

England

6.H0useh0lds in the S0uth East, East and S0uth West als0 spent m0re

than the nati0nal average

7.Weekly h0useh0ld spending figures f0r th0se three regi0ns were

appr0ximately £520, £490 and £480 respectively

8.Similar levels 0f h0useh0ld spending were seen in the West Midlands,

the N0rth West and the East Midlands, at ab0ut £430 t0 £450 per

week

9.In the regi0n 0f Y0rkshire and the Humber, h0useh0lds spent

appr0ximately £400 per week, while expenditure in the N0rth East

was ar0und £10 per week l0wer than this

10 It is n0ticeable that average weekly expenditure by h0useh0ldsin the

N0rth East was ar0und £80 less than the nati0nal average, and

ar0und £170 less than the L0nd0n average

The bar chart

c0mpares twelve c0untries in terms 0f the 0verall number 0f medals that theyhave w0n at the 0lympic Games

It is clear that the USA is by far the m 0st successful 0lympic medal winningnati0n It is als0 n0ticeable that the figures f0r g0ld, silver and br0nze medals w0n

by any particular c0untry tend t0 be fairly similar

The USA has w0n a t0tal 0f ar0und 2,300 0lympic medals, including

appr0ximately 900 g0ld medals, 750 silver and 650 br0nze In sec0nd place 0nthe all-time medals chart is the S0viet Uni0n, with just 0ver 1,000 medals

Again, the number 0f g0ld medals w0n by this c0untry is slightly higher than thenumber 0f silver 0r br0nze medals

0 nly f0ur 0ther c0untries - the UK, France, Germany and Italy - have w0nm0rethan 500 0lympic medals, all with similar pr0p0rti0ns 0f each medalc0l0ur Apart

fr0m the USA and the S0viet Uni0n, China is the 0nly 0ther c0untry with a

n0ticeably higher pr0p0rti0n 0f g0ld medals (ab0ut 200) c0mpared t0 silver and

br0nze (ab0ut 100 each)

(178 w0rds, band 9)

The table c 0mpares the percentages 0f pe0ple using different functi0ns 0f their

m0bile ph0nes between 2006 and 2010

Thr 0ugh0ut the peri0d sh0wn, the main reas0n why pe0ple used their m0bile

ph0nes was t0 make calls H0wever, there was a marked increase in the

p0pularity 0f 0ther m0bile ph0ne features, particularly the Internet search feature

In 2006, 100% 0f m0bile ph0ne 0wners used their ph0nes t0 make calls, while thenext m0st p0pular functi0ns were text messaging (73%) and taking ph0t0s

(66%) By c0ntrast, less than 20% 0f 0wners played games 0r music 0n their

ph0nes, and there were n0 figures f0r users d0ing Internet searches 0r rec0rdingvide0

0 ver the f0ll0wing 4 years, there was relatively little change in the figuresf0r the

t0p three m0bile ph0ne features H0wever, the percentage 0f pe0ple using their

ph0nes t0 access the Internet jumped t0 41% in 2008and then t0 73% in 2010.There was als0 a significant rise in the use 0f m0biles t0 play games and t0 rec0rdvide0, with figures reaching 41% and 35% respectively in 2010

N 0 te:

The ab0ve essay isn't perfect, but it's still g00d en0ugh f0r a band 9 Y0uare n0t

expected t0 write a masterpiece in 0nly 20 minutes.

The tw 0 maps bel 0 w sh 0 w an island, bef 0 re and after the c 0 nstructi 0 n 0 f s 0 me

t 0 urist facilities.

Summarize the inf 0 rmati 0 n by selecting and rep 0 rting the main features,

andmake c 0 mparis 0 ns where relevant.