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TASK 1:
The chart gives information about daily bodily salt intake in the US in 2000
Report Plan:
Paraphrase paragraph: gives information about>compares;
intake>consumption; according to various age groups
Overview/summary paragraph: (1) figures were higher among males (2)
the 19-25 age group consumed the most salt
Paragraph 3: report and compare figures for ages under 6 to 15-18 year
olds Note that after the age of 6, people of all ages consumed more salt than the recommended daily amount
Paragraph 4: report the peak figures for 19-25 Report the declining trend
and report the figures for the over 60s
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2000 according to various age groups
Overall, it is clear that the bodily intake of salt was higher among males The age
group 19-25 consumed more salt per day than people in other age categories
Daily salt intake increased steadily from the age of less than 6 to the ages 19-25
Under the age of 6, boys consumed 2,000 milligrams of salt per day compared with
1,750 milligrams for girls The older age groups all consumed more than the
recommended daily amount for adults (2,500 milligrams) of salt Among boys, the figure rose from 3,250 milligrams for ages 11-13 to 3,500 milligrams for 15-18 year-
olds The salt intake for girls, however, was slightly lower
The consumption of salt reached a peak for ages 19-25, at 4,250 milligrams for boys and 4,000 milligrams for girls The daily intake then declined steadily, falling among the over 60s to 2,750 and 2,500 milligrams for males and females respectively
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In most countries, prison is the most common solution to the problem of
criminals However, a more effective way is to provide better education so that they do not commit crime To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Essay Plan:
Introduction: refer to the task question My own opinion – better
education is the key to prevent crime, not imprisonment
Paragraph 2: imprisonment is not the best way to prevent crime Example:
the USA Two reasons: (1) criminals often re-offend when they leave prison (2) criminals who mix with other offenders make contacts and become more expert criminals
Paragraph 3: need for education to prevent crime Example: the UK – (1)
in schools – using former prisoners to warn pupils of the dangers (2) in prisons themselves – to help prisoners gain skills/qualifications to make a new start in life
Conclusion: education is more effective than imprisonment in preventing
crime
Essay:
It is true that in many countries, imprisonment is the most common punishment for
those who commit crimes While this removes some dangerous and possibly violent
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be more effective by preventing crime in the first place
It is wrongly believed by policy makers that the conviction and imprisonment of
criminals is the best way to tackle rising crime rates As a result, for instance, the
USA now has more prisoners than farmers, but this has not reduced the number of offences which are committed in that country There are two reasons why everyone should question the effectiveness of a policy of imprisonment to act as a deterrent
Firstly, without adequate training facilities, criminals who serve a prison sentence
will often simply return to a life of crime when they are released back into society
Secondly, prisons are often places where criminal contacts and knowledge are shared
among offenders, so that they serve as schools of crime, not education
On the other hand, I completely agree with those who argue for the need for
education in order to discourage criminal behaviour One place where this could be done is in schools In the UK, for example, former offenders are sometimes used by
the police to give talks to pupils on the dangers of drug-trafficking or becoming
involved in other crimes Another opportunity for education to combat crime is in
prisons themselves, to prevent re-offending by helping prisoners to reintegrate back into society Gaining qualifications and skills, criminals have a better chance of
rehabilitation and to make a fresh start in life
In conclusion, I believe that education is a better way than imprisonment to prevent
crime and to stem the growing number of criminals
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Vocabulary from crime and punishment:
to convict a criminal
Meaning: to find an offender guilty and to punish them
Example: Once the courts have convicted a criminal, the punishment should be
severe
to act as a deterrent
Meaning: a measure which makes somebody less likely to do something
Example: Longer prison sentences would act as a deterrent and would be one
useful measure to tackle rising crime
to serve a prison sentence
Meaning: to carry out confinement in prison as a punishment
Example: They are serving long prison sentences for their part in the
assassination
to release back into society
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Example: He was released back into society after serving two years of a
five-year sentence
drug trafficking
Meaning: importing and selling illegal drugs
Example: Some people argue that legalising drugs would put an end to the evil
of drug trafficking and the violence associated with it
to reintegrate back into society/ the community
Meaning: to restore someone through education or therapy
Example: There is an increasing focus among policy-makers and practitioners on identifying programs and strategies that will help prisoners successfully
reintegrate back into their communities without re-offending
a chance of rehabilitation
Meaning: a chance of helping someone to have a normal life after serving a prison sentence
Example: We should give ex-offerders a chance of rehabilitation and teach
them how to become useful members of society
to make a fresh start
Meaning: to try something new after making mistakes in one’s life
Example: I believe that people should have the opportunity to make a fresh start
after they are released from prison
Other vocabulary:
a policy maker [noun]:
Meaning: someone who creates ideas and plans, especially those carried out by
a business or government
Example: Policy makers in the USA must choose between spending on the
military and improving public healthcare
offence [noun]:
Meaning: an illegal action
Example: The new law makes it an offence to carry guns
to re-offend [verb]:
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Example: Currently, almost half of adult prisoners re-offend within a year of
release
Đề 12/12/2019
Nguồn đề task 1 lấy từ Robert ielts town
Report Plan:
Trang 10 Paraphrase paragraph: show>illustrate; the water supply system at the
present> the present system of supplying water
Overview/summary paragraph: (1) in future, no water will be discharged
into rivers (2) waste and storm water will be recycled
Paragraph 3: report the present water supply system
Paragraph 4: report the changes which will take place in the water
treatment plant
Report:
The diagrams illustrate the present system of supplying water to shops, households and factories in Australian cities, with proposed future changes
Overall, it is clear that in the future no water will be discharged into rivers Instead,
water treatment plants will treat waste water and storm water, ready for recycling to consumers in the cities
The first stage in the present water supply system is the collection and storage of water in dams This pure water is then delivered to factories, households and shops in the cities Waste water then goes to a treatment plant, after which it is discharged into rivers The excess of storm water in cities also goes into rivers
In the future, while the supply of pure water to the cities is expected to remain
unchanged, a major change will occur in the treatment of waste and storm water from the cities Waste and storm water will go to the water treatment plant, and no water will enter the rivers It is planned to return the treated water to the cities as pure water after treatment
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Across the world, a few languages have been increasing in use, but many other languages have declined in use Do you think that this is a positive or negative development?
Essay Plan:
Introduction: refer to the task question My own opinion: despite positive
aspects, it is a negative trend
Paragraph 2: positive aspect – the worldwide transmission of knowledge
with the growth of a few major languages It facilitates business, work, study or get a visa (e.g Australia)
Paragraph 3: negative aspect – the loss of a language = the loss of a
culture It marks the loss of traditional ways of life, story-telling, the bond between generations
Conclusion: the loss of traditional cultures indicates that this development
is largely negative
Essay:
It is true that across the world, a few languages have come to dominate, resulting in a
loss of diversity in the languages in which people communicate While this has some
positive aspects, I believe that it is a largely negative trend
On the one hand, there is one major positive aspect of the growth of a small number
of languages which are in use worldwide This is the transmission of knowledge as people are enabled to communicate outside a small community As a result of the dramatic socio-economic changes in recent decades, English, Spanish and Mandarin
Chinese are now used internationally The majority of English speakers, for example,
do not have English as their first language However, they have learned English in
order to do business, to work, to study or even to acquire a visa In a multicultural
society like Australia, the best way to integrate into society is to express oneself in
English
On the other hand, when a language is lost, then an important part of a culture is
lost The modern world is shaped by such things as advances in technology and the
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In conclusion, I believe that the world is a poorer place culturally with the
disappearance or decline in use of many languages with the growth of a globalised culture and economy
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Vocabulary from education:
transmission of knowledge
Meaning: the process of passing knowledge from one person to another
Example: I believe that the transmission of knowledge is more effective in
face-to-face interaction with teachers rather than online learning
Vocabulary from society:
socio-economic changes
Meaning: changes relating to the society and economy of a country
Example: Mass migration to cities is a result of socio-economic changes that
include the industrialisation of agriculture
a multicultural society
Meaning: a society which includes people of different origins, traditions and languages
Example: Immigration has led to the development of multicultural societies in the
US, Europe and Australia
to integrate into society
Meaning: to become accepted as a member of a social group, especially when a person comes from a different culture
Example: Children from minority groups often find it easy to integrate into society
because they attend schools which are multicultural
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Meaning: the movement of workers from one place to another
Example: The migration of labour from the countryside to the cities is a feature
of modern society
social mobility
Meaning: the movement of individuals from one class in society to another
Example: Free access to education has resulted in greater social mobility in modern
Example: Schools should encourage pupils to express themselves through art,
music or creative writing in order to stimulate their imagination
Vocabulary from technology:
advances in technology
Meaning: the improvement or development in technology
Example: Recent advances in medical technology are making a great contribution
to the search for a cure for Aids
Vocabulary from communication and personality:
to live in harmony with one another
Meaning: to live with others in a way which avoids conflict or disagreement Example: The students who share the house are all good friends and they are able
to live in harmony with one another
Other vocabulary:
to acquire [verb]:
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Example: The supermarket has acquired a new site, near the motorway
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Paraphrase paragraph: show>compare; plan>layout; now>today
Overview/summary paragraph: (1) population is larger today (2) a lake
passes through the centre of the business district
Paragraph 3: report and compare – the population 1950 and now,
changes to the business district, the river/lake/bridges
Paragraph 4: report and compare – the residential area 1950 and now, the
new road, changes to the government buildings and airport
Report:
The maps compare the layout of a city in 1950 and the city today
Overall, it is clear that the population now is ten times larger than in 1950 The
business district is also larger today, with a large lake passing through the centre of this district
In 1950, the city had 20,000 inhabitants, compared with 200,000 people today The
business district was located north of the river Today, a dam has blocked the river, creating a lake which divides the expanded business district into two sections The
original bridge remains in place, but another bridge crosses the lake to the east
The residential area has expanded greatly since 1950, now completely encircling the business district to the north and south of the river Four major roads intersected in
the business district in 1950, however a new road has been built south of the river Only one government building is on the 1950 map, but there are two government
buildings today, one in the business district and one in the residential area, both south
of the river The airport to the south-east of the city has also been expanded
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