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Contents

2 - PART QUESTION 3

1 Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment 3

2 'Technology' essay 5

3 'Music' essay 6

4 Economic essay 8

5 family history’ topic 9

6 take care of their children 10

DISCUSSION + OPINION 11

1 'Minority languages' essay 11

2 Studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career 13

3 'Museums' essay 14

4 Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media 15

5 'Video games' essay 18

6 Animal testing' essay 19

7 'Artists' essay 20

8 Studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career 21

9 'independence' question 22

10 'road safety' essay 23

OPINION 24

1 'Gender and university' essay 24

2 'Help' essay 25

3 A Carrer Path Early 27

4 'Hobbies' essay 28

5 'Unpaid work' essay 29

6 'Foreign tourists' essay 31

7 Salary 32

8 Celebrities 32

9 Families 33

10 'wild animals' essay (bài dạng mới 080115) 34

PROBLEM/SOLUTION 35

1 Average life expectancy 35

DISCUSSION 36

1 Studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career 36

2 - PART QUESTION

1 Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment

Usually I suggest writing 4 paragraphs for task 2 However, sometimes it might be better

to write 5 paragraphs The following essay question has three parts, so I've written three main body paragraphs (5 paragraphs in total)

Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

Humans are responsible for a variety of environmental problems, but we can also take steps to reduce the damage that we are causing to the planet This essay will discuss environmental problems and the measures that governments and individuals can take

to address these problems

Two of the biggest threats to the environment are air pollution and waste Gas

emissions from factories and exhaust fumes from vehicles lead to global warming, which may have a devastating effect on the planet in the future As the human

population increases, we are also producing ever greater quantities of waste, which contaminates the earth and pollutes rivers and oceans

Governments could certainly make more effort to reduce air pollution They could

introduce laws to limit emissions from factories or to force companies to use renewable energy from solar, wind or water power They could also impose ‘green taxes’ on drivers and airline companies In this way, people would be encouraged to use public transport and to take fewer flights abroad, therefore reducing emissions

Individuals should also take responsibility for the impact they have on the environment They can take public transport rather than driving, choose products with less packaging, and recycle as much as possible Most supermarkets now provide reusable bags for shoppers as well as ‘banks’ for recycling glass, plastic and paper in their car parks By reusing and recycling, we can help to reduce waste

In conclusion, both national governments and individuals must play their part in looking after the environment

Note:

This essay is exactly 250 words long I've tried to make it as simple as possible, but it's still good enough to get a band 9

Useful Comments:

1)

I have one question like You have just written only one sentence in conclusion, that is excellent without doubt, but do we need to tell something about first part of question like some of the ways in which we are damaging the environment? or it is alright to mention only about solutions from government and individuals in conclusion?

please do not mind, I am just asking not assesing your work

Thanking you,

Jay

Posted by: Jay | Wednesday, August 18, 2010 at 13:56

Hi Jay,

I´m glad you like the essay Don´t worry - your question is really useful

You are right that it would be a good idea to mention the problems in the conclusion as well as the solutions However, this wouldn´t change your score The conclusion is much less important than the main body paragraphs If you´re in a hurry at the end of the exam, a one-sentence conclusion will be fine

All the best,

For IELTS, just use "humans" or "human beings" to refer to everyone on the planet The others are probably not going to be appropriate in most IELTS contexts

Posted by: Simon | T

2 'Technology' essay

Several people have asked me about this question from Cambridge IELTS 8 I wrote the essay below with the help of some of my students A few simple linking features are highlighted

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology

In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people

make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

It is true that new technologies have had an influence on communication between

people Technology has affected relationships in various ways, and in my opinion there are both positive and negative effects

Technology has had an impact on relationships in business, education and social

life Firstly, telephones and the Internet allow business people in different countries to interact without ever meeting each other Secondly, services like Skype create new possibilities for relationships between students and teachers For example, a student can now take video lessons with a teacher in a different city or country Finally, many people use social networks, like Facebook, to make new friends and find people who share common interests, and they interact through their computers rather than face to face

On the one hand, these developments can be extremely positive Cooperation between people in different countries was much more difficult when communication was limited

to written letters or telegrams Nowadays, interactions by email, phone or video are almost as good as face-to-face meetings, and many of us benefit from these

interactions, either in work or social contexts On the other hand, the availability of new communication technologies can also have the result of isolating people and

discouraging real interaction For example, many young people choose to make friends online rather than mixing with their peers in the real world, and these ‘virtual’

relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships

In conclusion, technology has certainly revolutionised communication between people, but not all of the outcomes of this revolution have been positive

It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found around the world Music is a vital part of all human cultures for a range of reasons, and I would argue that traditional music is more important than modern, international music

Music is something that accompanies all of us throughout our lives As children, we are taught songs by our parents and teachers as a means of learning language, or simply

as a form of enjoyment Children delight in singing with others, and it would appear that the act of singing in a group creates a connection between participants, regardless of their age Later in life, people’s musical preferences develop, and we come to see our favourite songs as part of our life stories Music both expresses and arouses emotions

in a way that words alone cannot In short, it is difficult to imagine life without it

In my opinion, traditional music should be valued over the international music that has become so popular International pop music is often catchy and fun, but it is essentially

a commercial product that is marketed and sold by business people Traditional music,

by contrast, expresses the culture, customs and history of a country Traditional styles, such as (example) , connect us to the past and form part of our cultural identity It would be a real pity if pop music became so predominant that these national styles disappeared

In conclusion, music is a necessary part of human existence, and I believe that

traditional music should be given more importance than international music

(261 words, band 9)

Collocations are groups of words that are often found together Native speakers have a large repertoire of these word groups, and can use them without thinking Language learners need to build their own repertoire of collocations through reading and listening, and by noticing word groups that commonly occur

Here are some collocations from the essay I wrote last week:

use what you learn

When you learn a new word, collocation or phrase, it's a good idea to try using it in different contexts For example, the collocations in last week's lesson came from an essay about music, but maybe we can use them for other topics

As an example, I'll choose the topic of education, and I'll write a couple of sentences

around some of the collocations (underlined) from last week:

In primary schools, more importance should be given to creativity and problem solving, and these skills should be valued over memorisation and rote learning Creativity can be fostered by exposing children to a rich variety of media, and by encouraging them

to express their emotions

4 Economic essay

Economic progress is often used to measure a country's success However, some people believe that other factors are more important What other factors should also be considered when measuring a country's success? Do you think one factor is more important than others?

The relative success of different countries is usually defined in economic terms There are several other factors, apart from the economy, that could be used to assess a country, and

in my opinion education is the most important of all

Standards of education, health and individual human rights should certainly be considered when measuring a country’s status A good education system is vital for the development

of any nation, with schools, colleges and universities bearing the responsibility for the

quality of future generations of workers Healthcare provision is also an indicator of the standard of living within a country, and this can be measured by looking at average life expectancy rates or availability of medical services Finally, human rights and levels of equality could be taken into account For example, a country in which women do not have the same opportunities as men might be considered less successful than a country with better gender equality

In my view, a country’s education system should be seen as the most important indicator

of its success and level of development This is because education has a considerable

effect on the other two factors mentioned above It affects people’s health in the sense that doctors and nurses need to be trained, and scientists need to be educated to the highest

levels before they can carry out medical research It also affects the economy in the sense that a well-educated workforce will allow a variety of companies and industries to flourish, leading to trade with other countries, and increased wealth

In conclusion, nations can be assessed and compared in a variety of ways, but I would

argue that the standard of a country's education system is the best measure of its

success

(288 words, band 9)

5 family history’ topic

In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one's own family Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative

development?

Note:

I would call this a “2-part question” The task is NOT to write an essay about the

positives

and negatives of researching family history The task is to explain why people do it, and

then give your opinion as to whether it is a positive OR negative thing to do

Essay Plan - 10 minutes

Paragraph 1: Just write 2 sentences

- introduce the topic

- give an overall answer to both questions

Paragraph 2: Why might people want to research family history?

- various different reasons

- to know more about themselves and their roots, where they come from, whether their ancestors had similar personality traits

- because the Internet makes it easier to do this research, we hear about others who have

done it, there are even advertisements to encourage us

- out of curiosity e.g we might secretly hope that we have a famous or wealthy ancestor Paragraph 3: Is it positive or negative?

- positive in my view

- a fascinating hobby, a nice way to spend free time, a good talking point with family and friends e.g if we discover a particularly interesting ancestor

- a good way to teach children about history, how earlier generations lived

- we may even find “long-lost” family members, distant relatives that we might have the chance to meet

Paragraph 4:

- conclude by repeating (paraphrasing) the overall answer to bo

In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one's own family Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative

development?

Here's the plan I wrote for the first main body paragraph:

 Paragraph 2: Why might people want to research family history?

 various different reasons

 to know more about themselves and their roots, where they come from, whether their ancestors had similar personality traits

 because the Internet makes it easier to do this research, we hear about others who have done it, there are advertisements to encourage us

 out of curiosity e.g we might secretly hope that we have a famous or wealthy

ancestor

Here's a full paragraph using the ideas above:

There are various reasons why people might decide to trace their family histories One explanation may be that they would like to know more about themselves, in terms of their roots, where they come from, or whether their ancestors had similar personality traits Another factor could be that it has become so much easier to carry out

genealogical research using the Internet We hear about people who have studied their family trees, and there are even advertisements to encourage us to use genealogy websites Finally, it may be that people are simply curious to find out whether they have any famous or wealthy ancestors

6 take care of their children

These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while

mothers go out to work What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

It is true that men are increasingly likely to take on the role of househusband, while more women than ever are the breadwinners in their families There could be several reasons for this, and I consider it to be a very positive trend

In recent years, parents have had to adapt to various changes in our societies Equal rights movements have made great progress, and it has become normal for women to gain qualifications and pursue a career It has also become socially acceptable for men

to stay at home and look after their children At the same time, the rising cost of living has meant that both marriage partners usually need to work and save money before starting a family Therefore, when couples have children, they may decide who works and who stays at home depending on the personal preference of each partner, or based

on which partner earns the most money

In my view, the changes described above should be seen as progress We should be happy to live in a society in which men and women have equal opportunities, and in which women are not put under pressure to sacrifice their careers Equally, it seems only fair that men should be free to leave their jobs in order to assume childcare

responsibilities if this is what they wish to do Couples should be left to make their own decisions about which parental role each partner takes, according to their particular circumstances and needs

In conclusion, the changing roles of men and women in the family are a result of wider changes in society, and I believe that these developments are desirable

(274 words, band 9)

DISCUSSION + OPINION

1 'Minority languages' essay

Today, I'd like to share a 'band 9' sample essay for the question below

Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people Some people say that governments should spend

public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money

Discuss both these views and give your opinion

It is true that some minority languages may disappear in the near future Although it can

be argued that governments could save money by allowing this to happen, I believe that these languages should be protected and preserved

There are several reasons why saving minority languages could be seen as a waste of money Firstly, if a language is only spoken by a small number of people, expensive education programmes will be needed to make sure that more people learn it, and the state will have to pay for facilities, teachers and marketing This money might be better spent on other public services Secondly, it would be much cheaper and more efficient for countries to have just one language Governments could cut all kinds of costs

related to communicating with each minority group

Despite the above arguments, I believe that governments should try to preserve

languages that are less widely spoken A language is much more than simply a means

of communication; it has a vital connection with the cultural identity of the people who speak it If a language disappears, a whole way of life will disappear with it, and we will lose the rich cultural diversity that makes societies more interesting By spending money

to protect minority languages, governments can also preserve traditions, customs and behaviours that are part of a country’s history

In conclusion, it may save money in the short term if we allow minority languages to disappear, but in the long term this would have an extremely negative impact on our cultural heritage

(258 words)

2 Studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career

Here's an example of how I write a 4-paragraph essay for "discuss and give your

opinion" questions Notice that I give my opinion in 3 places (introduction, paragraph 3, conclusion)

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school

Discuss both views and give your opinion

When they finish school, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a job or continue their education While there are some benefits to getting a job straight after school, I would argue that it is better to go to college or university

The option to start work straight after school is attractive for several reasons Many young people want to start earning money as soon as possible In this way, they can become independent, and they will be able to afford their own house or start a family In terms of their career, young people who decide to find work, rather than continue their studies, may progress more quickly They will have the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession This may lead to promotions and a successful career

On the other hand, I believe that it is more beneficial for students to continue their

studies Firstly, academic qualifications are required in many professions For example,

it is impossible to become a doctor, teacher or lawyer without having the relevant

degree As a result, university graduates have access to more and better job

opportunities, and they tend to earn higher salaries than those with fewer qualifications Secondly, the job market is becoming increasingly competitive, and sometimes there are hundreds of applicants for one position in a company Young people who do not have qualifications from a university or college will not be able to compete

For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that students are more likely to be successful in their careers if they continue their studies beyond school level

(271 words, band 9)

3 'Museums' essay

Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate

Discuss both views and give you own opinion

People have different views about the role and function of museums In my opinion, museums can and should be both entertaining and educational

On the one hand, it can be argued that the main role of a museum is to entertain

Museums are tourist attractions, and their aim is to exhibit a collection of interesting objects that many people will want to see The average visitor may become bored if he

or she has to read or listen to too much educational content, so museums often put more of an emphasis on enjoyment rather than learning This type of museum is

designed to be visually spectacular, and may have interactive activities or even games

as part of its exhibitions

On the other hand, some people argue that museums should focus on education The aim of any exhibition should be to teach visitors something that they did not previously know Usually this means that the history behind the museum’s exhibits needs to be explained, and this can be done in various ways Some museums employ professional guides to talk to their visitors, while other museums offer headsets so that visitors can listen to detailed commentary about the exhibition In this way, museums can play an important role in teaching people about history, culture, science and many other aspects

of life

In conclusion, it seems to me that a good museum should be able to offer an

interesting, enjoyable and educational experience so that people can have fun and learn something at the same time

(253 words, band 9)

4 Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media

Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for

communicating information State which you consider to be the most effective

There are various benefits and drawbacks of books, radio and television as ways to

convey information In my view, television is definitely the most effective of these three

media

The main advantage of books is that they are usually considered to be reliable sources

of information People tend to refer to books when they want to research a subject in

depth, and for this reason they continue to play an important role in education On the

other hand, books quickly go out of date, and therefore they are not the best medium for

communicating news stories

Radio is a much more effective medium than books for the communication of up-to-date

information We can listen to news broadcasts about events as they happen, and a key

benefit of radio is that we can listen to it while doing other activities, such as driving or

working The main drawback of radio, when compared to books or television, is that

there is no visual element; we cannot see what the broadcaster is describing

In my opinion, television is the most effective of these three media because it brings us

closer to reality than a book or radio programme ever can For example, we can watch

events as they take place on the other side of the world, or we can see the body

language of a politician who is being interviewed The disadvantages of television are

that programmes tend to be short and interrupted by advertisements, meaning that

information is presented in limited depth

In conclusion, although books, radio and television each have their advantages and

disadvantages, it seems to me that the impact of television is greater

Useful Comments:

1) disadvantages, it seems to me that

hi simons, u put comma before it instead of fullstop

in conclusion

if i m nt wrong

Posted by: jay | Wednesday, February 15, 2012 at 12:03

it seems to me that the impact of television is greater

Hi Simon,

Shouldn't it read "the greatest" instead of "greater", since you're comparing 3 things?

Posted by: Bassel | Wednesday, February 15, 2012 at 18:45

I have two questions:

1 what is the exact meaning of the sentence: It can be argued that (which you used in your essay)

2 what is the difference between "justifiable" and "justified"? Are they interchangeable when I say: It is justifiable for someone to do something

thanks

Answer:

If you describe a decision, action, or idea as justified, you think it is reasonable and acceptable

In my opinion, the decision was wholly justified (you think the decision was

reasonable.)

An action, situation, emotion, or idea that is justifiable is acceptable or correct because there is a good reason for it

The violence of the revolutionary years was justifiable on the grounds of political

necessity (You think there is a good reason for this action.)

I found you express your opinion in three ways in your essay:

1 there is no your point of view (the essay about the function of museum)

2 there is your point of view in the second main body (the essay about whether

teenagers should get a job or continue their education.)

3 there is your point of view at the end of a paragraph (the example of writing task two

on Wednesday, October 12, 2011: from this perspective, sports stars do not deserve the salaries they currently earn)

I am quite confused where I should express my opinion

ANSWER:

Hi Bart,

1 It just means "some people say/argue that "

2 Christina answered your second question perfectly See her comment further up this page

3 You described the different ways of expressing your opinion really well - I'm pleased

to see that you have analysed the different ways I have done it What this shows is that there is no rule about where (in the main body) your opinion should be My only

personal rule is that your opinion should be clear in the introduction and conclusion (if the question asks for it)

5 'Video games' essay

Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful

educational tool Others, however, believe that videos games are having an

adverse effect on the people who play them In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

Many people, and children in particular, enjoy playing computer games While I accept that these games can sometimes have a positive effect on the user, I believe that they are more likely to have a harmful impact

On the one hand, video games can be both entertaining and educational Users, or gamers, are transported into virtual worlds which are often more exciting and engaging than real-life pastimes From an educational perspective, these games encourage imagination and creativity, as well as concentration, logical thinking and problem

solving, all of which are useful skills outside the gaming context Furthermore, it has been shown that computer simulation games can improve users’ motor skills and help

to prepare them for real-world tasks, such as flying a plane

However, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks Gaming can be highly addictive because users are constantly given scores, new targets and frequent rewards to keep them playing Many children now spend hours each day trying

to progress through the levels of a game or to get a higher score than their friends This type of addiction can have effects ranging from lack of sleep to problems at school, when homework is sacrificed for a few more hours on the computer or console The rise

in obesity in recent years has also been linked in part to the sedentary lifestyle and lack

of exercise that often accompany gaming addiction

In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of video games are more

significant than the possible benefits

(258 words, band 9)