Cẩm nang IELTS Writing task 1 ( Hướng dẫn chi tiết cách làm 6 dạng bài IELTS Writing task 1 )

Overall, the percentage of people who used the Internet at home and in the library remained relatively constant, while the figures for access at work and college decreased.. The percenta

DẠNG BAR CHART

Biểu đồ dạng cột (Bar chart) : thường hay sử dụng để thể

hiện tương quan về độ lớn giữa các đại lượng Trục tung thường là số liệu, trục hoành là mốc (có thể là năm, tháng )

BY NGOC BACH

DẠNG BAR CHART

Có 2 kiểu bar chart:

+ Có sự thay đổi theo thời gian

(Phải mô tả xu hướng, sự tăng lên, giảm xuống)

+ Không có sự thay đổi thời gian (chỉ so sánh các items)

Xem hướng dẫn tại đây:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R67l5N0f_Ss

Đề thi 25/04/2015

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MỞ BÀI

CÂU ĐỀ BÀI:

A survey conducted for the places in which people

CÂU VIẾT LẠI:

The bar chart illustrates data on the percentage of

locations between 1998 and 2004

PARAPHRASE

TỔNG QUAN

Tìm 2 đặc điểm chung của hình ???

Overall, the percentage of people who used the Internet at home and in the library remained relatively constant, while the figures for access at work and college decreased Also, home was by far the most common place where users accessed the Internet

THÂN BÀI

In 1998, the proportion of users accessing the Internet

lowest point of exactly 10% Approximately 27% of users

The percentage of Internet users gaining access from their houses rose to approximately 55% in 2004, after a decline

of about 8% in 2000 On the other hand, the figures for access

at work and college decreased to exactly 10% and around 18%, respectively, over the period Users accessing the Internet at the

The bar chart illustrates data on the percentage of users connecting to the Internet in 4 types of locations between 1998 and 2004.

Overall, the percentage of people who used the Internet at home and in the library remained relatively constant, while the figures for access at work and college decreased Also, home was by far the most common place where users accessed the Internet

In 1998, the proportion of users accessing the Internet from home was the highest, at around 54% By contrast, the rate for those who used it at the library was at the lowest point of exactly 10% Approximately 27% of users connected to the Internet at work, compared to precisely 20% at college.

The percentage of Internet users gaining access from their houses rose to approximately 55% in 2004, after a decline of about 8% in 2000 On the other hand, the figures for access at work and college decreased to exactly 10% and around 18%, respectively, over the period Users accessing the Internet at the library increased about 5% from 1998 to 2000 and then dipped slightly in 2002, where it remained steady throughout 2004.

(Band 8.0+)

Written by Ngoc Bach

IELTS EXAMINER COMMENTS

You covered all the requirements of the task, and all the information that you reported was accurate

You selected information effectively, Bach and your report was clear throughout I noted that you made relevant comparisons between the figures and the trends There is a lot of information in the chart – it is quite deceptive, because at first it appears that we would be able to report almost everything, but this is not the case.

So, I found that your detail paragraphs were organised logically, enabling trends and differences to be

compared.

My combined score for task achievement and coherence/cohesion is 9.

Some repetition is unavoidable in the language used, such as access/Internet users, and this is quite

legitimate in order to present a clear and accurate report Of course, it is great to use language such as By contrast/However/On the other hand because these are very effective words when we want to draw contrasts You varied your use of percentage/rate/proportion and I noted your good expression ‘by far the

most common ’ I scored 9 again for lexical resource.

Your grammar was faultless, Bach, and I noted how you varied your sentence structures For example, in

paragraph 3, you began one sentence with the percentage: Approximately 27% of users connected to

The examiner should also notice your correct use of subordinate [adverb and relative clauses] and

superlatives I have to score 9 for grammar.

LƯU Ý

+ Xem file “Hướng dẫn ôn tập_Bar chart” + Download file “Vocabulary_Bar chart”

BY NGOC BACH

Hope you guys like my lesson ^^

IELTS WRITING SAMPLES

Written by Ngoc Bach

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart illustrates the data about 5 activities Australian children prefer to do in their spare time

Overall, boys do more of each activity than girls (except for arts and crafts and watching TV or videos) Another visible trend is that, while boys are more active than girls, both still prefer sedentary activities such as TV and video games

The percentage of Australian youngsters in both genders watching TV or videos is equal, at 100% Electronic or computer games are much more preferred by boys than by girls The figures are slightly over 80% and 60% respectively Likewise, bike riding also attracts boys more than girls in their spare time Boys’ involvement in this activity is nearly 80%, whereas the figure for girls is a little under 60%

Around 40% of 5-to-14-year-old boys enjoy skateboarding or rollerblading, while the proportion of girls at this age is only slightly more than 20% In contrast, the figure for girls spending their leisure time on art and craft is greater than their male counterparts, at just under 60% and approximately 35% respectively

181 words

Written by Ngoc Bach

IELTS WRITING SAMPLES

Hi Bach,

A native speaker would probably not write a better report than this, Bach

Very well done in all sections of the marking

Grade Task Response 9.0 Your first paragraph is a concise and accurate paraphrase of what the chart

contains You change enough words to satisfy the examiner

I cannot fault your summary paragraph – you identified two key points and you provided a clear overview

Cohesion and

Coherence

9.0 The organisation of your detail paragraphs was clear, and it enabled you to

make comparisons consistently between the leisure activities of boys and girls The result was a comprehensive and organised report

In paragraph 3, you contrasted their participation in both skateboarding/rollerboarding and art/craft The figures are accurate In paragraph 4, you contrasted their participation in the other three categories and the figures were accurately reported once more

Vocabulary 9.0 the vocabulary was clear and your choice of words was accurate I was

particularly impressed by your range of vocabulary to express comparison and contrast: Likewise/In contrast/while/whereas You skilfully used a good range of words to refer to boys and girls: both genders/male counterparts/youngsters/Australian children I scored 9.0 again

Grammar 9.0 Your grammar was band 9 level, Bach It was accurate throughout the

report and so I then checked your range of grammar I found the correct use of adverb clauses and comparative forms and you varied the structures

of your sentences

Overall 9.0 The site (ielts-exam.net) that you used is a good one, Bach Sometimes, I

do not agree that all their model answers are band 9, however, so be careful

of them I suspect that your report is probably better than their model answer (I will check it later when I have time) Your answer might well score 9 from the examiners

IELTS WRITING SAMPLES

Written by Ngoc Bach

This was a good task to do, because it is a chart which does not show changes over a period of time, and these charts are sometimes given in the exam You wrote a great report, and I have almost no suggestions to make

on how you could improve it

WRITING TASK 1: BAR CHART

Đây là bài viết mà bạn đã thấy trong video của mình:

The bar chart illustrates data on the percentage of users connecting to the Internet in 4 types of locations between 1998 and 2004

Overall, the percentage of people who used the Internet at home and in the library remained relatively constant, while the figures for access at work and college decreased Also, home was by far the most common place where users accessed the Internet

In 1998, the proportion of users accessing the Internet from home was the highest, at around 54% By contrast, the rate for those who used it at the library was at the lowest point of exactly 10% Approximately 27% of users connected to the Internet at work, compared to precisely 20% at college

The percentage of Internet users gaining access from their houses rose to approximately 55% in 2004, after a decline of about 8% in 2000 On the other hand, the figures for access at work and college decreased to exactly 10% and around 18%, respectively, over the period Users accessing the Internet at the library increased about 5% from 1998 to 2000 and then dipped slightly in 2002, where it remained steady throughout 2004

Các bạn hãy một lần nữa phân tích kỹ lại bài report của mình và trả lời các câu hỏi sau:

1 Phương pháp mình đã sử dụng để viết bài report trên ? Mình viết bao nhiêu câu cho Introduction, bao nhiêu câu cho Overvỉew, bao nhiêu câu cho mỗi khổ thân bài ?

2 Có bao nhiêu dạng Bar chart ? Cách giải cho từng dạng như thế nào ?

3 Gạch chân các cụm từ tốt (good vocabulary) trong bài report của mình

Written by Ngoc Bach

Answers:

1 Tất cả các bài IELTS Writing task 1 mình đều sử dụng cùng 1 phương pháp:

+ 1 câu cho phần Introduction (bằng cách paraphrase lại câu của đề bài)

+ 2 câu cho phần Overview (nêu 2 đặc điểm chung nổi bật của biểu đồ) Lưu ý không đưa số liệu cụ thể vào phần này

+ 3-4 câu cho mỗi khổ thân bài Lưu ý trong phần thân bài luôn luôn đưa số liệu cụ thể và so sánh các số liệu với nhau

2 Có nhiều loại bar chart Các loại bar chart là đều có thể chỉ ra số liệu hoặc xu hướng Cách làm chung cho tất cả các dạng bar chart đó là:

+ Mô tả số liệu (Ví dụ: 3% of people were unemployed)

+ So sánh các số liệu với nhau (Ví dụ: 3% of Americans were unemployed, whereas 5% of Canadians had no job)

+ Mô tả và so sánh xu hướng nếu có (Ví dụ: The unemployment rate rose from 3% in 2000 to 6% in 2005)

3 Các cụm từ tốt trong bài Mọi người đọc kỹ phần giải nghĩa và ví dụ để có thể áp dụng cho các bài khác (Nội dung của phần này sẽ được giáo viên bản xứ đọc trong file mp3 "VOCABULARY")

 illustrates data on (mô tả thông tin về ): to illustrate means to show, to demonstrate; data (or data)

includes information, figures, statistics, numbers, percentages, etc…when you write “data on” it means that you will show specific information about a topic, some research, numbers, etc; “this table

illustrates data on the ages of residents in our town”

 locations (địa điểm, vị trí): areas, spaces, where something is located; “our store has many locations

throughout town”

 remained relatively constant (giữ nguyên không đổi một cách tương đối): to remain means to stay;

relatively means related to other things, in relation to; mostly; constant means the same; to remain relatively constant means to stay mostly the same as before; “home prices remained relatively constant throughout the year”

 decreased (giảm): went down, declined; “rents decreased from $1,000 per month to $800 per month”

 by far ( được sử dụng cùng với tính từ và trạng từ so sánh hơn hoặc so sánh nhất để chỉ mức độ

cao, số lượng lớn): by a long way, by a lot; “he was by far the strongest man in the room”

 by contrast (tương phản): used when you compare two things together and you talk about the

differences, the contrast refers to how they are different; you can also say in contrast; “she performed well on her final exams; by contrast, her brother failed his finals”

 approximately (xấp xỉ): almost, just about, nearly; “they made approximately $5,000 last night at the

concert”

 precisely (một cách chính xác): exactly, the precise number or figure; “they made precisely $6.00 per

sale”

 gaining access (có quyền truy cập): to be able to get access to something after not having access to it;

“more and more people are gaining access to the Internet”

 rise (tăng): went up, increased; “temperatures rose yesterday by 10 degrees”

 a decline of (một sự giảm đi): a decrease of; going down; “there was a decline in overall stock prices

yesterday”

 on the other hand (mặt khác): used to say something different about something; usually used to say

the opposite and give a reason; “on the one hand, she is quite intelligent and openminded; on the other

hand, she doesn’t always do well on her exams and can be quick to judge people”

 over the period (trong khoảng thời gian): to describe the duration of time during a period of time;

“over the period of a month, she has learned so much Spanish”

 dipped slightly (giảm nhẹ): to dip means to go down or to decline; slightly means by a little; “the price

of apples dipped slightly last month:

 remained steady throughout (giữ nguyên ổn định trong khoảng thời gian): to stay about the same

during a time period; “the cost of gas remained steady throughout the summer months”

Written by Ngoc Bach

PHƯƠNG PHÁP HỌC TỪ VỰNG

Lưu ý rằng chìa khóa để đạt điểm cao IELTS Writing là "Vocabulary" Tất cả giám khảo IELTS mình biết

đều khẳng định rằng "vocabulary is the key to language learning, and it's the key to a good IELTS score The more words and phrases you know, the better you'll do in the test" (ielts-simon.com) Do vậy, mình đã hợp tác cùng 1 vị giám khảo IELTS ở Anh (do thầy Simon trên trang ielts-simon.com giới thiệu) và giáo viên IELTS bản xứ Mỹ biên soạn và thu âm -> giúp mọi người học từ mới dễ dàng nhất có thể Không những giúp mọi người nâng điểm IELTS Writing, còn giúp nâng trình tiếng Anh nói chung của mọi người nữa

Cách học như sau:

+ Các bạn đọc và nghiên cứu kỹ transcript (mục 3 về từ vựng phía trên) Khi học, mọi người nên đọc kỹ phần

giải thích bằng tiếng anh để hiểu rõ nghĩa của từ Phần tiếng việt chỉ để tham khảo vì nhiều cụm đôi khi khó thể dịch sát nghĩa hoàn toàn, chỉ dịch đại ý để mọi người hiểu Khi đọc cố tưởng tượng ra ngữ cảnh mình sử dụng trong bài viết của mình

+ Copy file mp3 "VOCABULARY" vào điện thoại, nghe đi nghe lại càng nhiều càng tốt (ít nhất 100 lần),

vừa nghe vừa lặp lại giọng đọc của người bản xứ Làm như vậy, không chỉ học từ -> tốt cho kỹ năng Writing

mà đồng thời kỹ năng Listening, Speaking của mọi người cũng sẽ cải thiện đáng kể

+ Tự đặt câu ví dụ của riêng mình và cố gắng áp dụng vào bài viết, bài nói của bạn

Làm theo 3 bước như vậy, mọi người có thể hiểu và sử dụng thành thạo các cụm từ trên, biến chúng thực sự thành của mình

Chúc mọi người học tốt ! -Ngọc Bách-

DẠNG LINE GRAPH

Biểu đồ dạng dây (line graph) : thường dùng để miêu

tả sự thay đổi (lên, xuống, thay đổi liên tục) của 1 điều

gì đó qua thời gian thường là thay đổi qua năm, tháng.

BY NGOC BACH

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between

1920 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Birth Rates in China and the USA

China: đỏ

USA : xanh

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MỞ BÀI

Câu viết lại: The line graph compares birth rates in

China and the US and how these rates changed from 1920

to 2000

Câu của đề bài: The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000.

TỔNG QUAN

Cách viết câu tổng quan của dạng Line graph:

+ Nhìn vào bức tranh tổng thể của biểu đồ -> tìm xem sự thay đổi nào xảy ra ở tất cả các dây (lines) từ đầu đến cuối khoảng thời gian được chỉ ra trong biểu đồ

+ Nhìn vào điểm cao nhất, thấp nhất

+ Nếu nhiều hơn 2 dây, có thể nhìn vào dây có sự thay đổi lớn nhất.

Chú ý: Không đưa số liệu cụ thể ở phần tổng quan

BY NGOC BACH

China: đỏ

USA : xanh

TỔNG QUAN

Overall, the birth rates of both nations decreased over the period of

80 years Although the two trends were similar in terms of a general decline, the birth rate of the USA in most years was higher than that

of China.

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between

1920 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Birth Rates in China and the USA

China: đỏ

USA : xanh

BY NGOC BACH

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Thân Bài

Cách phân tích hình và chia đoạn :

+ Phân thành 2 khổ, mỗi khổ 1 dây

+ Nhìn vào hình chú ý những điểm cao nhất, thấp nhất và chia các dây (lines) ra thành những đoạn mà trong đó xu hướng của chúng phải khác nhau ví dụ đoạn này “tăng”, đoạn kia “giảm”, đoạn tiếp theo “tăng đột ngột”…

(Lưu ý chỉ chia từ 3,4 đoạn, tránh chia quá nhiều đoạn)

Birth Rates in China and the USA

China: đỏ

USA : xanh

BY NGOC BACH

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PHÂN CHIA GIAI ĐOẠN

Đối với dây xanh :

In the 1920-1935 period, the birth rate in America fluctuated,

although it always remained above 10% However, in the

following decade, the American birth rate fell sharply to below

5% In the 1950s, the figure for the USA increased significantly to

exactly 15%, which was its highest point during the 80-year

period Throughout the remainder of the period, there was a gradual decline in the US birth rate, which fell to 7% by the year

2000.

BY NGOC BACH

THÂN BÀI 1

Over the same period, the birth rate in China varied more

significantly than in the US It dropped to 5% from 1940 to

1945 before reaching the highest point of the whole line graph,

20%, in 1950 By contrast, 5 years later, the birth rate in

China decreased rapidly by over 10%, falling to approximately

2% in 2000.

THÂN BÀI 2

In the 1920-1935 period, the birth rate in America fluctuated, although it always remained above 10% However, in the following decade, the American birth rate fell sharply to below 5% In the 1950s, the figure for the USA increased significantly to exactly 15%, which was its highest point during the 80-year period Throughout the remainder of the period, there was a gradual decline in the US birth rate, which fell to 7% by the year 2000.

Over the same period, the birth rate in China varied more significantly than in the

US It dropped to 5% from 1940 to 1945 before reaching the highest point of the whole line graph, 20%, in 1950 By contrast, 5 years later, the birth rate in China decreased rapidly by over 10%, falling to approximately 2% in 2000 (Band 8.0+)

Written by Ngoc Bach

IELTS EXAMINER COMMENTS

Your paraphrase paragraph is certainly accurate and clear If I was the examiner, I would say that you changed enough of the words.

You then wrote a good summary paragraph You identified two key features and proved to the examiner that you have a complete and accurate overview of the information given.

The vocabulary and grammar were otherwise faultless I will follow the strictest examiner and say that you needed to change the paraphrase paragraph a little more My combined score for vocabulary and grammar is therefore 8.5.

For coherence and cohesion my score is 9, and for task achievement I scored 8.5.

My overall score is 8.5.

This was a report of a very high standard, Bach.

“by the year 2000” or “in the year 2000” ?

There is not much difference between 'by the year 2000' and 'in the year 2000' I used 'by' only to indicate that the figure fell over a period of years to reach just 7% in the year 2000 Either preposition would be correct in that sentence.

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+ Use "by" when looking at the years BEFORE and UP TO By contrast,

"in 2000" would mean "only in the year 2000" (during that year only).

+ when using "by" with years, we usually (but not always) use the past

perfect

e.g By the year 2000, Korea had reduced its waste output.

BY NGOC BACH

LƯU Ý

+ Xem file “Hướng dẫn ôn tập_Linegraph” + Download file “Vocabulary_Linegraph”

Hope you guys like my lesson ^^

- Ngoc Bach

BY NGOC BACH