WRITING PORTFORLIO WRITING SKILL 3 topic 3 an important event in your life the first month of my part time job

Topic 3: An important event in your lifeThe first month of my part-time job *Outline IIntroduction: - The hook: Did you remember the first time you made your own money?. 2 Does the intro

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Modul e Topic Version 1 Signed/ Score Version 2 Signed/ score Version 3 1 Module 1 Narrative essay 1 An importance event or experience in your life X X 2 A memorable memory X X 3 Time –writing: A misunderstanding between yourself and someone else X X 2 Module 2 Opinion essay 1 TV is bad for children Do you agree or disagree? X X X 2 Is it a good idea for university students to have a part-time job? X X 3 Time-writing: It is said that school uniform should be obligatory at high school Do you agree or disagree? X X Teacher/ score: :

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Topic 3: An important event in your life

The first month of my part-time job

*Outline

I)Introduction:

- The hook: Did you remember the first time you made your own money?

- Background: It seems to me that it was a very important event when I was still ahigh school student

- Thesis statement: This experience left me a lesson in appreciating the value of

money

II)Body:

- Topic sentence: I started my first job with a lot of difficulties and troubles

- The setting: It was a summer vacation, but instead of choosing to go on a tripwith my family, I decided to work part-time at a bakery where I had never beenbefore

- The characters: The owner of the bakery is a woman in her fifties.

- The climax: Unfortunately, I burned a few breads and received complaints from

my customer

- The solution: + I had the enthusiastic guidance of my manager

+ In the following times, I worked more carefully

*Version 1

Did you remember the first time you made your own money? It seems to me that

it was a very important event when I was still a high school student Thisexperience left me a lesson in appreciating the value of money

I started my first job with a lot of difficulties and troubles Surprisingly, it was asummer vacation as usual, but instead of choosing to go on a trip with my family, Idecided to work part-time at a bakery where I had never been before The owner

of the bakery is a woman in her fifties My main jobs there were that in addition

to taking orders from customers and preparing food according to theirrequirements, I also had to clean the floor regularly to keep it in the bestcondition Firstly, I worked according to her instructions but since I was anewcomer, so everything I did was still unprofessional Due to the large number ofcustomers, I was often overloaded, especially during rush hours On oneunfortunate time, I burned some breads and received a lot of complaints from mycustomer In that moment, I just wanted to give up, but my mind told me to keeptrying Fortunately, I received timely help from my manager She taught mewholeheartedly without any complaints I felt very grateful to her because thanks

to her supports, I regained my composure and motivation to continue working Inthe following times, I worked more carefully

In my first month, I could not receive the salary, but I felt extremely happybecause I had worked hard Eventually, I understood that making money was noteasy, so we needed to learn how to use money effectively

CHECKLIST

1 Does the essay have

three paragraphs?

Yes, it has intro, body and conclusion

2 Does the introduction

include the hook,

they support the topic

sentence of the body

paragraph?

Yes of both

4 Does the body include

the topic sentence?

Which one?

Yes, it is “I started my first job with a lot of difficulties and troubles.”

5 Does the essay include

time adverbs and

7 Does the conclusion

explain what you

learned from the

experience?

Yes

*Version 2

Did you remember the first time you made your own money? It seems to me that

it was a very important event when I was still a high school student Thisexperience left me a lesson in appreciating the value of money

I started my first job with a lot of difficulties and troubles Surprisingly, it was asummer vacation as usual, but instead of choosing to go on a trip with my family, Idecided to work part-time at a bakery where I had never been before The owner

of the bakery is a woman in her fifties Basically, my main jobs there were that inaddition to taking orders from customers and preparing food according to theirrequirements, I also had to clean the floor regularly to keep it in the bestcondition Firstly, I worked according to her instructions but since I was anewcomer, so everything I did was still unprofessional Due to a large number ofcustomers, I was often overloaded, especially during rush hours At oneunfortunate time, I burned some breads and received a lot of complaints from mycustomer At that moment, I just wanted to give up, but my mind told me to keeptrying Fortunately, I received timely help from my manager She taught mewholeheartedly without any complaints After that, I felt very grateful to herbecause thanks to her supports, I regained my composure and motivation tocontinue working In the following times, I worked more carefully

In my first month, I could not receive the salary, but I felt extremely happybecause I had worked hard Eventually, I understood that making money was noteasy, so we needed to learn how to use money effectively

Topic: Write an essay about your unforgettable memory.

"Goosebumps" was the feeling I got when I recounted the hide-and-seekgame on a camping trip with my friends last year

It was a beautiful sunny day, and we decided to organize a picnic together torelax after a stressful working week We have chosen a very suitable place to set

up camp and organize recreational activities When everything was in place, Isuddenly realized that I had left my prepared lunch at home I had to go backhome to bring them to the camp to the anger of my friends Fortunately, when Igot back they were calm and helped me put my lunch on the table While we washaving lunch, we came up with an idea for the hide-and-seek game in the forestnext to our campsite Everyone was very interested until we couldn't find eachother because the forest was too wide I opened my phone to search for a wayback, but it couldn't pick up the signal It was also getting dark and cold by thistime, which gave me goosebumps I panicked and yelled for help By chance, myphone was normally working back but I received a lot of missed calls from myfriend It turned out that they had returned to the camp and were already ontheir way to find me About ten minutes later, they found me in a state of fear

I felt extremely happy at that moment and promised myself that I would neverplay this game, especially in a forest Although we didn't do much, but thecamping is a memorable one for us

CHECKLIST

Questions Answers Suggested correction

1 Does the essay havethree paragraphs? Yes

2 Does the introduction include the hook, background information and thesisstatement? No I think your introduction is missing the hook sentence and thethesis sentence Your hook sentence might be a question: Have you ever had that

"Goosebumps" feeling?

3 Does the body contain enough background information and specific details?

Do they support the topic sentence of the body paragraph? Yes

4 Does the body include the topic sentence? Which one? No Personally,your body is missing the topic sentence

5 Does the essay include time adverbs and subordinating conjunctions? Not

at all You need to add time adverbs to your essay such as then, before,eventually and so on

6 Are all the verbs in the correct forms? Yes .n a forest Although

we didn't do much, but the camping is a memorable one for us .-> remove theword "but" and keep the word "Although"

7 Does the conclusion explain what you learned from the experience? Yes

Version 2

Topic: Write an essay about your unforgettable memory

Have you ever felt so scared that you got goosebumps? That was the feeling Igot when I recounted the hide-and-seek game on a camping trip with my friendslast year Honestly, I believe that the following experience will make you feel thesame

It was a beautiful sunny day, and we decided to organize a picnic together torelax after a stressful working week, which was also the beginning of a series oftroubles Firstly, we chose a very suitable place to set up camp and organizerecreational activities When everything was in place, I suddenly realized that Ihad left my prepared lunch at home I had to go back home to bring them to thecamp to the anger of my friends Fortunately, when I got back they were calm andhelped me put my lunch on the table While we were having lunch, we came upwith an idea for the hide-and-seek game in the forest next to our campsite.Everyone was very interested until we couldn't find each other because the forestwas too wide I opened my phone to search for a way back, but it couldn't pick upthe signal It was also getting dark and cold by that time, which gave megoosebumps I panicked and yelled for help By chance, my phone was normally

working back but I received a lot of missed calls from my friend It turned out thatthey had returned to the camp and were already on their way to find me Aboutten minutes later, they found me in a state of fear

I felt extremely happy at that moment and promised myself that I would neverplay this game, especially in a forest Although we didn't do much, the camping is

a memorable one for us

An misunderstanding between yourself and someone

else

Introduction

Hook: “A single moment of misunderstanding is so poisonous, that it makes us

forget the hundred lovable moments spent together within a minute”

Topic sentence: It was a class session as usual, when An opened his pen case and

discovered that his beloved pen had mysteriously disappeared, which was thebeginning of misunderstanding between us

Descriptive details:

• He searched and searched but still couldn't find the pen

• I helped him find it He opened my pen case and discovered a similar one

• He hastily blamed me for being a thief without any specific evidence

• I tried to explain that it was the pen I bought yesterday, and that it was just

• Suddenly, a friend walked up to An and gave him the pen back Sheborrowed An's pen yesterday, but she forgot to return it.

• An was surprised and he regretted He apologized to me for thismisunderstanding and I forgave him as well

• After that time, the trust we had for each other was no longer the same.Conclusion

• I almost lost a best friend in less than ten minutes

• It was one of those unnecessary misunderstandings that I still remember tothis day

• It was necessary to stay calm because "the mind is like water When it'sturbulent, it's difficult to see When it's calm, everything becomes clear" (PrasadMahes)

Keep Calm

Version 1

“A single moment of misunderstanding is so poisonous, that it makes us forget thehundred lovable moments spent together within a minute” This is even worsewhen it happens between two close friends who share a table in a classroom Thefollowing will be a lesson about calm that I have learned from my own story

It was a class session as usual, when An opened his pen case and discovered thathis beloved pen had mysteriously disappeared, which was the beginning ofmisunderstanding between us Immediately, he searched and searched but hestill couldn't find the pen I helped him find it Unfortunately, he opened my pencase and discovered a similar one I was surprised that even though there was noobvious evidence, he accused me of being a thief After that, I tried to explain that

it was the pen I bought yesterday, and that it was just a coincidence However, hedidn't trust me despite my explanation, he still made a fuss in front of the wholeclass, which made me felt so embarrassed and I cried Suddenly, a friend walked

up to An and gave him the pen back She borrowed An's pen yesterday, but sheforgot to return it An was surprised and he regretted Moreover, he apologized to

me for that misunderstanding and I forgave him as well After that time, the trust

we had for each other was no longer the same I almost lost a best friend in lessthan ten minutes.

That was one of those unnecessary misunderstandings that I still remember tothis day It was essential to stay calm because "the mind is like water When it'sturbulent, it's difficult to see When it's calm, everything becomes clear" (PrasadMahes)

Co time clause, conjunction, feeling ch aư

Version 2

“A single moment of misunderstanding is so poisonous, that it makes us forget thehundred lovable moments spent together within a minute” This is even worsewhen it happens between two close friends who share a table in a classroom Thefollowing will be a lesson about calm that I have learned from my own story

I still remember that it was a disastrous misunderstanding between me and mybest friend An when we were in middle school That was a class session as usual,when An opened his pen case and discovered that his beloved pen hadmysteriously disappeared, which was the beginning of misunderstanding between

us Immediately, he searched and searched but he still couldn't find the pen.Afterwards, I helped him find it Unfortunately, he opened my pen case anddiscovered a similar one I was surprised that even though there was no obviousevidence, he accused me of being a thief Simultaneously, I tried to explain that itwas the pen I bought yesterday, and that it was just a coincidence However, hedidn't trust me despite my explanation, he still made a fuss in front of the wholeclass, which made me felt so embarrassed and I cried Suddenly, a friend walked

up to An and gave him the pen back She borrowed An's pen yesterday, but sheforgot to return it An was surprised and he regretted Moreover, he apologized to

me for that misunderstanding and I forgave him as well After that time, the trust

we had for each other was no longer the same I almost lost a best friend in lessthan ten minutes

I felt extremely furious with An, who I had always trusted and cherished, butfinally I forgave That was one of those unnecessary misunderstandings that I stillremember to this day It was essential to stay calm because "the mind is like

water When it's turbulent, it's difficult to see When it's calm, everything becomesclear" (Prasad Mahes)

Topic: TV is bad for children Do you agree or disagree?

- Thesis statement: Personally, I totally agree with the second group because I

know TV has a lot of benefits for children that I will list below

+ Develop critical thinking: Express their opinions on topical issues

- Counter-argument: Besides the advantages, there are disadvantages that

children can face If their parents allow them to watch TV uncontrollably, they willeasily become addicted, even glued to the TV for many hours In addition,watching non-selective programs, such as those that are violent or inappropriatefor their age, will inadvertently cause children to display erroneous expressions intheir behaviour As a result, the child will gradually withdraw and not want tocommunicate with anyone, which is especially bad for children's mental health